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  题目:Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.Do you agree or disagree?
  范文;
  Many young people work on a volunteer basis, and this can only be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I do not agree that we should therefore force all teenagers to do unpaid work.
  Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies, without being given the added responsibility of working in their spare time. School is just as demanding as a full-time job, and teachers expect their students to do homework and exam revision on top of attending lessons every day. When young people do have some free time, we should encourage them to enjoy it with their friends or to spend it doing sports and other leisure activities. They have many years of work ahead of them when they finish their studies.
  At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain from obliging young people to do unpaid work. In fact, I would argue that it goes against the values of a free and fair society to force a group of people to do something against their will. Doing this can only lead to resentment amongst young people, who would feel that they were being used, and parents, who would not want to be told how to raise their children. Currently, nobody is forced to volunteer, and this is surely the best system.
  In conclusion, teenagers may choose to work for free and help others, but in my opinion we should not make this compulsory.
  (250 words, band 9)




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题目:The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

  范文:

  It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that often seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I agree that some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others are still useful and should not be forgotten.

  On the one hand, many of the ideas that elderly people have about life are becoming less relevant for younger people. In the past, for example, people were advised to learn a profession and find a secure job for life, but today’s workers expect much more variety and diversity from their careers. At the same time, the ‘rules’ around relationships are being eroded as young adults make their own choices about who and when to marry. But perhaps the greatest disparity between the generations can be seen in their attitudes towards gender roles. The traditional roles of men and women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer accepted as necessary or appropriate by most younger people.

  On the other hand, some traditional views and values are certainly applicable to the modern world. For example, older generations attach great importance to working hard, doing one’s best, and taking pride in one’s work, and these behaviours can surely benefit young people as they enter today’s competitive job market. Other characteristics that are perhaps seen as traditional are politeness and good manners. In our globalised world, young adults can expect to come into contact with people from a huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more important than ever to treat others with respect. Finally, I believe that young people would lead happier lives if they had a more ‘old-fashioned’ sense of community and neighbourliness.

  In conclusion, although the views of older people may sometimes seem unhelpful in today’s world, we should not dismiss all traditional ideas as irrelevant.

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 题目:Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  范文:

  It is true that ex-prisoners can become normal, productive members of society. I completely agree with the idea that allowing such people to speak to teenagers about their experiences is the best way to discourage them from breaking the law.

  In my opinion, teenagers are more likely to accept advice from someone who can speak from experience. Reformed offenders can tell young people about how they became involved in crime, the dangers of a criminal lifestyle, and what life in prison is really like. They can also dispel any ideas that teenagers may have about criminals leading glamorous lives. While adolescents are often indifferent to the guidance given by older people, I imagine that most of them would be extremely keen to hear the stories of an ex-offender. The vivid and perhaps shocking nature of these stories is likely to have a powerful impact.

  The alternatives to using reformed criminals to educate teenagers about crime would be much less effective. One option would be for police officers to visit schools and talk to young people. This could be useful in terms of informing teens about what happens to lawbreakers when they are caught, but young people are often reluctant to take advice from figures of authority. A second option would be for school teachers to speak to their students about crime, but I doubt that students would see teachers as credible sources of information about this topic. Finally, educational films might be informative, but there would be no opportunity for young people to interact and ask questions.

  In conclusion, I fully support the view that people who have turned their lives around after serving a prison sentence could help to deter teenagers from committing crimes.

  (287 words, band 9)

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题目:Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

  范文:

  People have different views about how much choice students should have with regard to what they can study at university. While some argue that it would be better for students to be forced into certain key subject areas, I believe that everyone should be able to study the course of their choice.

  There are various reasons why people believe that universities should only offer subjects that will be useful in the future. They may assert that university courses like medicine, engineering and information technology are more likely to be beneficial than certain art degrees. From a personal perspective, it can be argued that these courses provide more job opportunities, career progression, better salaries, and therefore an improved quality of life for students who take them. On the societal level, by forcing people to choose particular university subjects, governments can ensure that any knowledge and skill gaps in the economy are covered. Finally, a focus on technology in higher education could lead to new inventions, economic growth, and greater future prosperity.

  In spite of these arguments, I believe that university students should be free to choose their preferred areas of study. In my opinion, society will benefit more if our students are passionate about what they are learning. Besides, nobody can really predict which areas of knowledge will be most useful to society in the future, and it may be that employers begin to value creative thinking skills above practical or technical skills. If this were the case, perhaps we would need more students of art, history and philosophy than of science or technology.

  In conclusion, although it might seem sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful subjects, I personally prefer the current system in which people have the right to study whatever they like.

  (297 words, band 9)

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题目:In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

  范文:

  In recent years it has become far more normal for people to live alone, particularly in large cities in the developed world. In my opinion, this trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.

  The rise in one-person households can be seen as positive for both personal and broader economic reasons. On an individual level, people who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members. A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills; an increase in the number of such individuals can certainly be seen as a positive development. From an economic perspective, the trend towards living alone will result in greater demand for housing. This is likely to benefit the construction industry, estate agents and a whole host of other companies that rely on homeowners to buy their products or services.

  However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. Firstly, rather than the positive feeling of increased independence, people who live alone may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation and worry. They miss out on the emotional support and daily conversation that family or flatmates can provide, and they must bear the weight of all household bills and responsibilities; in this sense, perhaps the trend towards living alone is a negative one. Secondly, from the financial point of view, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and rents. While this may benefit some businesses, the general population, including those who live alone, will be faced with rising living costs.

  In conclusion, the increase in one-person households will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy.

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雅思作文素材运用汇总(2017)(1)

 Requirements
  typos 拼写错误
  layout 排版
  contents page 目录
  subheadings 副标题
  formatting 格式
  numbering 编码
  page numbers 页码
  headers 页眉
  footers 页脚
  bullet points 要点列举
  Methodology
  study 研究
  branch 分支
  identify 鉴定,验明
  research 研究
  investigation 调查
  survey 调查
  data, statistics, figure 数据


【科技类】
  Some people think playing computer games is bad for children on everything. Others think it has some positive on the way children develop. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. 有人认为计算机游戏对于孩子是有害的,有人认为计算机游戏对于孩子的发展有积极的影响,讨论两种观点,给出你的意见?
  考察网络游戏对于孩子的利弊影响。
  【科技类】
  Films and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have negative effect on society and should be banned. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion? 电影和计算机游戏中含有暴力元素,因此受欢迎,有人认为他们对于社会的影响是消极的,有人认为,他们仅仅是无害的娱乐方式,讨论两种观点?
  【电视类】
  A study shows that a lot of children from the age 7 to 11 spend too much time watching television or playing video games. How do you think this problem influence the children their families and the society? What measures should be taken to solve it? 研究显示:7岁到11岁的年轻人花费太多时间看电视,玩游戏,这对于孩子,家庭和社会的影响何在? 应该如何解决?
  【两种观点讨论布局图】
  首段:背景介绍 (个性开篇)+ 争议焦点(句型引导)+作家立场(清晰表达)
  二段:正方观点的展开(三点理由)
  三段:反方观点的展开(二点理由)
  尾段:再次亮明观点+(总结理由)
  【作家立场】 沉迷于网络游戏,对于孩子而言,是弊大于利。
  【思路拓展】
  【弊端的展开】
  1.孩子长期沉迷于网络游戏,有害健康。具体而言,孩子们可能会近视,懒惰,肥胖以及养成久坐的生活方式。
  2. 网络游戏中的不良信息对于青少年会产生不良的影响,因为游戏中包含的色情、暴力、血腥的信息,会误导年轻人的人生观,毒害他们纯净的心理,诱发他们暴力的冲动,使得校园欺凌增加。
  3. 对于家庭,孩子们沉迷网络游戏会疏远家庭关系,不利于亲子交流,因为孩子们玩网络游戏时间多,和家人交流时间就少。
  【利好的展开】
  1. 网络游戏是孩子们在紧张的生活之余,放松身心的很好的一种的方式。
  2. 网络游戏也有助于孩子们智力开发,培养他们的反应能力或者团队意识。
  【范文赏析】
  【首段】 背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
  Many children always take playing on-line games as the only source of their entertainment that is why numerous parents are concerned by the fact that their children are spending too much time playing computer games. As I see it, the demerits of allowing children to play on-line games outbalance its possible demerits.
  【解析】
  The demerits of allowing children to play on-line games outbalance its possible demerits. 容许孩子们玩网络游戏是弊大于利。
  【二段】:我方立场的展开:(网络游戏的弊端)
  Indeed, on no account can we overlook the potential downsides triggered by allowing children to be engrossed in computer games. First, excessive exposure to on-line games might decrease the players’ creativity and imagination. Meanwhile, the craziness about games is physically detrimental because it reduces physical activities, imaginably, the sedentary lifestyle would increase the likelihood of obesity. Further, we can never ignore the negative impacts caused by games in terms of family relationship. The more time children spend on TV or game, the less time they could allocate to family communication. Last, the current game contents are besieged with pornography, violence and blood. Consequently, they might corrupt one’s innocent mind, arouse one’s violent impulse and mislead one’s life outlook. Thus,those adult-only contents contained in computer games are also the possible root causes of school bullying.
  【解析】
  1. Indeed, on no account can we overlook the potential downsides triggered by …… 任何情况下我们都不能忽视由于……引起的弊端
  2. Those adult-only contents contained in computer games are also the possible root causes of school bullying 电子游戏中包含的少儿不宜信息同样可能是校园欺凌的根源。
  3. The current game contents are besieged with pornography, violence and blood. 当前的游戏经常充斥着色情,暴力和血腥。
  【三段】 对方立场的展开:(网络游戏的利好)
  Others,however,might remain suspicious of stand. Some people might think it won’t hurt to allow children to play on-line games. An argument hold by some people is that playing electronic games can provide players with much pleasure, playing games is an effective to relax one’s body and ease one’s mind, especially when students are under a pool of pressure. Also, some people think that playing computer games help develop the players’ intelligence and teamwork spirit because many challenging team games need strategy and co-operation. Nonetheless, what I want to rebut is that indulgence in computer games might make one get addicted or become social inadequate in real life.
  【解析】
  1. Others,however,might remain suspicious of stand. 也许有人对我的立场表示怀疑
  2. it won’t hurt to do sth v做……是没有坏处的
  3. become social inadequate in real life v在现实生活中变得力不从心
  4. Nonetheless, what I want to rebut is that 但是,我想反驳的是……
  【尾段】 再次亮明观点
  Overall,allowing children to play on-line game can be a double-edged sword, which can be used for equally good or evil. However, it is unwise to allow those who are in the formative years to overindulge in on-line games.
  【解析】
  1. …… can be a double-edged sword, which can be used for equally good or evil ……是一把双刃刀,有利有弊。
  2. overindulge in v过度沉迷
科技类:

  Someone think that robots are very important to humans' future development. Others thought that they are dangerous and have negative effects on the society. Discuss the advantages of disadvantages of the robots. 有人认为机器人对于人类的未来很重要,有人认为机器人很危险,对于社会有负面影响,讨论机器人的利弊?(2011年1月8日雅思作文)

  老师点评:本题同时适合写作雅思题目:科技对于人类和社会的影响。

  利弊讨论类提问标志:

  …… discuss the advantages of disadvantages. 讨论其利弊

  利大于弊布局图:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  二段:三个利好展开以及细节和论据的支持

  三段:二个弊端展开以及细节和论据的支持

  尾段:再次亮明观点 + 总结理由

  作家立场:机器人的使用是利大于弊。

  雅思老师思路拓展:

  智能机器人利好的展开:

  1. 机器人可以代替人做很多危险的或者重复的工作,这就节省了人力,人们可以从事其他方面的工作. 例如,可以利用机器人去深海探险或者太空探索。

  2. 企业中应用机器人可以提高工作效率,创造更多的经济价值。例如,新年期间,很多饭店出现用工荒,一家火锅店就购置了机器人服务生,机器人不仅仅节省了人力成本,缓解了用工的压力,更加成为吸引顾客的一道风景。可以想象,机器人在未来的企业发展中将会扮演更加重要的角色。

  智能机器弊端的展开:

  1. 如果人们多度地依赖机器人,那么这会导致人的创造力,灵活性以及主动性的下降。例如,很多传统的手工艺可能会慢慢地消失。

  2. 机器人的普及会使某些人失业。更糟糕的是,对于机器人的纵容有可能使它们成为世界上最先进的战争武器。

  雅思老师原创语料库:

  1. robot=mechanical person n机器人

  2. artificial intelligence n 人工智能

  3. Many industries are increasingly making use of the robots. 很多工业越来越多地使用机器人。

  4. …… can enhance the efficiency of work and generate more economic value v…… 可以提高工作效率以及创造更多的经济价值。

  5. Robots can be utilized to do some dangerous and repetitive tasks for human beings, therefore, it can enable people to be involved in other works. 机器人可以代替人做很多危险的重复的工作,这就节省了人力,可以使人们从事其他方面的工作。

  解析:be involved in v做……

  6. Too much reliance on the robots will contribute to people’s poor creativity, flexibility and self-motivation. 过度依赖机器人会导致人的创造力,灵活性以及主动性的下降。

  拓展:self-motivation = initiative n 主动性

  7. Many traditional crafts might be substituted by the robots in the future. 在未来,很多传统的手艺可能被机器人替代。

  8. The popularity of robots may take the bread out of some people’s mouths. 机器人的普及会使某些人失业。

  解析:take the bread out of one’s mouth v抢了某人的饭碗

  9. Even worse, being tolerant in robots might make them become the most advanced war weapon in the world.更糟糕的是,对于机器人的纵容也许会使它们成为世界上最先进的战争武器。

  解析:even worse 更加糟糕的是

  10. The invention of the robot has greatly revolutionized people’s life in many aspects. 机器人的发明,在很多方面,极大地改变了人们的生活。

  拓展:invention = contrivance n发明

  11. People have been debating the pros and cons of …… without reaching any definite agreement. 人们一直在争议……的利弊,没有达成共识。

  拓展:agreement = consensus n一直观点

  12. The availability of the robot has really brought huge convenience to people’s life, yet, its drawbacks should be stressed. 机器人给人们的生活带来了巨大的便利,但是,其弊端应该被强调。

  解析:bring huge convenience to ……,给……带来巨大的便利

  13. Robots have entered many offices or restaurants to help people to perform various tasks, thus , it is likely that people could enjoy more leisure time. 机器人已经进入了很多办公室或者饭店去帮助人们做很多的工作,因此,人们可以享受到更长的休闲时光。

  解析:thus,it is likely that……因此,很有可能……

  拓展:perform a task = undertake a task = take a task v 做一项工作

  14. For example, during the Spring Festal, a hotpot restaurant purchased a robot servant. The robot not only effectively reduced the pressure of the shortage of labor force, but also became a one particular scenery. Millions of customers deliberately ate in this restaurant to feel the sense of refreshment brought about by robot servant. 例如,在春节期间,一家火锅店购置一个机器人服务生,机器人不仅仅有效地缓解了劳动力短缺的压力,而且成为一道独特的景色。很多的顾客特意来这家餐馆就餐,目的就是为了感受机器人服务生带来的新鲜感。

  解析:deliberately adv 刻意地

  15. Artificial intelligence certainly help people stay away from heavy tasks. 人们智能可以帮助人们远离繁重的工作。

  16. However,some problems might inevitably ensue. 然而,一些问题也许不可避免地跟着发生。

  拓展:inevitably = unavoidably adv 不可避免地

  17. Robot soldiers might arouse chaos just like what is vividly described in the science fiction movies. 机器人士兵可能会引起混乱,就像是我们在科幻电影中看到的一样。

  解析:vividly adv 生动地

  18. The robot is a double-edged sword,which can be used for equally good or evil. 机器人是一把双刃剑,有利有弊。

  19. As for the potential demerits of robots, moral education and law restrictions should be advocated to regulate the use of the robot and to prevent misdeeds of human beings. 至于机器人的弊端,道德教育和法律的约束应该被提倡,去规范机器人的使用,去避免人类的犯罪行为。

  解析:potential demerits of ……,……的潜在的弊端

  解析:prevent misdeeds of human beings v阻止人类的犯罪行为

  20. In closing, my stand is that the merits of the robot prevail over its possible demerits as long as we can use them properly. 总之,我的立场是只要我们以理性的方式来利用机器人,机器人对于人类的作用是利大于弊。
科技类:

  Someone think that robots are very important to humans' future development. Others thought that they are dangerous and have negative effects on the society. Discuss the advantages of disadvantages of the robots. 有人认为机器人对于人类的未来很重要,有人认为机器人很危险,对于社会有负面影响,讨论机器人的利弊?(2011年1月8日雅思作文)

  老师点评:本题同时适合写作雅思题目:科技对于人类和社会的影响。

  利弊讨论类提问标志:

  …… discuss the advantages of disadvantages. 讨论其利弊

  利大于弊布局图:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  二段:三个利好展开以及细节和论据的支持

  三段:二个弊端展开以及细节和论据的支持

  尾段:再次亮明观点 + 总结理由

  作家立场:机器人的使用是利大于弊。

  雅思老师思路拓展:

  智能机器人利好的展开:

  1. 机器人可以代替人做很多危险的或者重复的工作,这就节省了人力,人们可以从事其他方面的工作. 例如,可以利用机器人去深海探险或者太空探索。

  2. 企业中应用机器人可以提高工作效率,创造更多的经济价值。例如,新年期间,很多饭店出现用工荒,一家火锅店就购置了机器人服务生,机器人不仅仅节省了人力成本,缓解了用工的压力,更加成为吸引顾客的一道风景。可以想象,机器人在未来的企业发展中将会扮演更加重要的角色。

  智能机器弊端的展开:

  1. 如果人们多度地依赖机器人,那么这会导致人的创造力,灵活性以及主动性的下降。例如,很多传统的手工艺可能会慢慢地消失。

  2. 机器人的普及会使某些人失业。更糟糕的是,对于机器人的纵容有可能使它们成为世界上最先进的战争武器。

  雅思老师原创语料库:

  1. robot=mechanical person n机器人

  2. artificial intelligence n 人工智能

  3. Many industries are increasingly making use of the robots. 很多工业越来越多地使用机器人。

  4. …… can enhance the efficiency of work and generate more economic value v…… 可以提高工作效率以及创造更多的经济价值。

  5. Robots can be utilized to do some dangerous and repetitive tasks for human beings, therefore, it can enable people to be involved in other works. 机器人可以代替人做很多危险的重复的工作,这就节省了人力,可以使人们从事其他方面的工作。

  解析:be involved in v做……

  6. Too much reliance on the robots will contribute to people’s poor creativity, flexibility and self-motivation. 过度依赖机器人会导致人的创造力,灵活性以及主动性的下降。

  拓展:self-motivation = initiative n 主动性

  7. Many traditional crafts might be substituted by the robots in the future. 在未来,很多传统的手艺可能被机器人替代。

  8. The popularity of robots may take the bread out of some people’s mouths. 机器人的普及会使某些人失业。

  解析:take the bread out of one’s mouth v抢了某人的饭碗

  9. Even worse, being tolerant in robots might make them become the most advanced war weapon in the world.更糟糕的是,对于机器人的纵容也许会使它们成为世界上最先进的战争武器。

  解析:even worse 更加糟糕的是

  10. The invention of the robot has greatly revolutionized people’s life in many aspects. 机器人的发明,在很多方面,极大地改变了人们的生活。

  拓展:invention = contrivance n发明

  11. People have been debating the pros and cons of …… without reaching any definite agreement. 人们一直在争议……的利弊,没有达成共识。

  拓展:agreement = consensus n一直观点

  12. The availability of the robot has really brought huge convenience to people’s life, yet, its drawbacks should be stressed. 机器人给人们的生活带来了巨大的便利,但是,其弊端应该被强调。

  解析:bring huge convenience to ……,给……带来巨大的便利

  13. Robots have entered many offices or restaurants to help people to perform various tasks, thus , it is likely that people could enjoy more leisure time. 机器人已经进入了很多办公室或者饭店去帮助人们做很多的工作,因此,人们可以享受到更长的休闲时光。

  解析:thus,it is likely that……因此,很有可能……

  拓展:perform a task = undertake a task = take a task v 做一项工作

  14. For example, during the Spring Festal, a hotpot restaurant purchased a robot servant. The robot not only effectively reduced the pressure of the shortage of labor force, but also became a one particular scenery. Millions of customers deliberately ate in this restaurant to feel the sense of refreshment brought about by robot servant. 例如,在春节期间,一家火锅店购置一个机器人服务生,机器人不仅仅有效地缓解了劳动力短缺的压力,而且成为一道独特的景色。很多的顾客特意来这家餐馆就餐,目的就是为了感受机器人服务生带来的新鲜感。

  解析:deliberately adv 刻意地

  15. Artificial intelligence certainly help people stay away from heavy tasks. 人们智能可以帮助人们远离繁重的工作。

  16. However,some problems might inevitably ensue. 然而,一些问题也许不可避免地跟着发生。

  拓展:inevitably = unavoidably adv 不可避免地

  17. Robot soldiers might arouse chaos just like what is vividly described in the science fiction movies. 机器人士兵可能会引起混乱,就像是我们在科幻电影中看到的一样。

  解析:vividly adv 生动地

  18. The robot is a double-edged sword,which can be used for equally good or evil. 机器人是一把双刃剑,有利有弊。

  19. As for the potential demerits of robots, moral education and law restrictions should be advocated to regulate the use of the robot and to prevent misdeeds of human beings. 至于机器人的弊端,道德教育和法律的约束应该被提倡,去规范机器人的使用,去避免人类的犯罪行为。

  解析:potential demerits of ……,……的潜在的弊端

  解析:prevent misdeeds of human beings v阻止人类的犯罪行为

  20. In closing, my stand is that the merits of the robot prevail over its possible demerits as long as we can use them properly. 总之,我的立场是只要我们以理性的方式来利用机器人,机器人对于人类的作用是利大于弊。
 科技类:

  Some people think that museums are getting less important, when people can have access to information on the Internet, to what extent do you agree or disagree? 有人认为博物馆不重要,我们可以在网络上获得信息(参观博物馆),是否认同?

  相关提问:

  Now, people can use Internet to see historic objects freely. People think we don’t need museum in the future. To what extend do you agree or disagree. (2010年12月4日)

  Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historic objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? (2007年6月7日)

  很多人使用网络免费欣赏文物,有人认为在未来我们不再需要博物馆,是否同意?

  有人认为我们可以用网络欣赏文物和艺术品,博物馆和艺术馆在未来不在被需要,是否认同?

  老师思路拓展:

  让步段:

  1. 对于短时内没有时间,没有钱去博物馆和美术馆的人来说,可以先在电脑上一饱眼福,间接的欣赏也会很有乐趣的。

  2. 对于可以去亲自参观的人来说,可以用计算机去收集一些博物以及美术馆的信息,去目的地的时候,印象更加深刻。

  反驳段:

  1. 亲自游览艺术馆美术馆更值得推荐,亲自参观,印象更加真实,深刻。人们可以在艺术馆和美术馆大饱眼福,欣赏各种各样的精致的展品以及精美的艺术品。相反,无论网上的图片有多精彩以及丰富,他们仅仅是图片。

  2. 艺术馆和美术馆有其不可替代性,因为历史文物和艺术产品有了存储的地方,有研究的价值。

  3. 很多的父母愿意带着孩子去美术馆,对于孩子们来说,欣赏真实的艺术品可以增长历史知识,启迪智慧,陶冶情操。对于艺术家来说,参观博物馆可以培养艺术美感以及激发创造力。

  老师原创语料库:

  1. museums and art galleries n博物馆和美术馆

  2. historic objects = historical relic n文物

  3. works of art = artwork n艺术品,美术品

  4. exhibits = item on display n展品

  5. museum piece n珍藏品

  6. antiques = curios n古董

  7. on the spot = on site n在现场

  8. in person adv 亲自地

  9. by using a computer = via the Internet v 通过互联网

  10. have limited disposable income v可支配收入有限

  11. can appreciate various works of art or exhibits to explore the wonder, beauty and eye-dazzling workmanship 欣赏艺术品和展品,探究艺术的精湛,美丽。

  12. appreciate = feast one’s eyes on v 大饱眼福

  13. cherish the dreams of …… = have the dreams of v 怀有…… 的梦想

  14. enlighten children’s wisdom and cultivate children’s artistic taste 启迪孩子的智慧,培养孩子的艺术美感。

  15. There are no better places than museums and art galleries for those museum piece, historic objects, and antiques to be collected, kept intact and studied. 有了艺术馆和美术馆,历史文物,古董可以被收集,保存,研究。



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抽象类:

  Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success .Others argue that happiness depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your opinion? 有人认为幸福来自经济成功,有人认为幸福来之其他源泉,讨论两种观点再给出你的意见?(2009年12月12日)

  相关题目:

  Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on health. Discuss both of the views and give your own opinion.幸福和经济成功关联,幸福来自健康,讨论再结论?(2012年10月11日)

  老师思路拓展:

  财富为何是幸福的源泉:

  1. 财富可以使的人的生活自由,舒适以及帮助人去实现诸多的梦想,例如:环游世界旅行,接受最好的教育,享受世间美食。

  2. 财富是社会资源的象征,可以赢得别人的尊敬以及羡慕,可以带来成就感。

  幸福的其他源泉:

  1. 健康是幸福生活的源泉,失去健康,拥有再多的财富,名声和地位都是没有任何意义的。生活中很多的例子,企业家富可敌国,但是,健康每况愈下,身体的负担带来心灵的压力,他们很难幸福。

  2. 有了健康的保障,人会更加容易事业成功家庭幸福,因为健康可以使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐。

  3. 一个身心健康的人一定是一个乐观自信的人,他开朗的性格会帮助他扩大交友圈,好友的增加自然带来生活的乐趣。

  老师原创语料库:

  1. happiness = sense of happiness n 幸福

  2. happiness = well-being = pleasure n快乐

  3. happiness index n幸福指数

  4. economic success = economic achievement n经济成就

  5. have large sums of money = own a great deal of wealth v 拥有财富

  6. have deep pockets = have money to burn v 财力雄厚

  7. wholesome physique and mentality n健康的身心

  8. is closely related to = is associated with 和……相关

  9. have little correlation to …… v和……不相关联

  10. …… is a more essential factor in achieving happiness ……是获得幸福更加重要的因素

  11. strengthen one’s sense of fulfillment v增强人的成就感

  12. earn respect and admiration from others v赢得别人的尊敬和羡慕

  13. fulfill one’s many wonderful dreams v实现诸多的美丽梦想

  14. travel all around the globe v环球旅行

  15. enjoy the delicious / delectable/ tasty foods in the world v享受世间美食

  老师原创句型语料库:

  1. Perhaps no issue has led to such an endless debate as to whether or not …… 也许没有什么像……一样引起无休止的争论。

  2. Standards towards happiness differ widely from person to person .人们对于幸福的标准是仁者见仁智者见智。

  3. Happiness lies, first of all, in health. 健康是幸福生活的本源。

  4. Under no circumstances can ignore the immense value of health management. 任何情况下不能忽视健康管理的巨大价值。

  5. Health enables one to brave the career challenges energetically and harmonize the family life optimistically 健康可以使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐。

  老师原创范文赏析:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 +作家立场

  People have been pondering for years the connotation of true happiness. Perhaps no issue has led to such an end less debate as to whether or not large sums of money could directly bring people well-being. Standards towards happiness differ widely from person to person. My view is that the sense of well-being could derive from wealth, however, other more significant factors have more indispensable roles to play in enhancing one’s happiness index.

  二段:论证财富为何是幸福的源泉

  Indeed, happiness do closely relate to economic achievement to some extent because a great amount of wealth can make people’s life more enjoyable, comfortable and free. To be more specific, one can fulfill his many dreams such as receiving fine education and traveling around the globe if he or she has deep pocket. Still, economic success implies high social status, which can bring people the sense of happiness and even earn respect from others.

  三段:论证幸福更加重要的源泉

  Notwithstanding all that, there is no definite correlation between the amount of one’s wealth and his or her happiness index. Happiness,sometimes, does not depend on economic success but completely on wholesome physique and mentality. First, happiness lies in health. More precisely, wealth, fame, or status will be of little meaning if one fails to ensure his health. To illustrate, some affluent enterprisers have money to burn, yet, they are basically unhappy due to the deteriorating health condition and huge mental pressure. Further, health ensures career success and family harmony. In other words, health enables one to brave the career challenges energetically and harmonize the family life optimistically. Ultimately, those who enjoy good health must be confident and optimistic, their pleasant characters can help them enlarge circle of friends. The multiplication of close friends will brighten their spirit and sweeten their lives.

  尾段:亮明观点+总结理由

  In the final analysis, I re-affirm my conviction that happiness is not only related to economic success but also links to health, which is more significant. Only by means of owing desirable health condition can we enjoy the lifelong sense of pleasure although wealth sometimes indicates the source of happiness.

抽象类:

  Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success .Others argue that happiness depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your opinion? 有人认为幸福来自经济成功,有人认为幸福来之其他源泉,讨论两种观点再给出你的意见?(2009年12月12日)

  相关题目:

  Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on health. Discuss both of the views and give your own opinion.幸福和经济成功关联,幸福来自健康,讨论再结论?(2012年10月11日)

  老师思路拓展:

  财富为何是幸福的源泉:

  1. 财富可以使的人的生活自由,舒适以及帮助人去实现诸多的梦想,例如:环游世界旅行,接受最好的教育,享受世间美食。

  2. 财富是社会资源的象征,可以赢得别人的尊敬以及羡慕,可以带来成就感。

  幸福的其他源泉:

  1. 健康是幸福生活的源泉,失去健康,拥有再多的财富,名声和地位都是没有任何意义的。生活中很多的例子,企业家富可敌国,但是,健康每况愈下,身体的负担带来心灵的压力,他们很难幸福。

  2. 有了健康的保障,人会更加容易事业成功家庭幸福,因为健康可以使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐。

  3. 一个身心健康的人一定是一个乐观自信的人,他开朗的性格会帮助他扩大交友圈,好友的增加自然带来生活的乐趣。

  老师原创语料库:

  1. happiness = sense of happiness n 幸福

  2. happiness = well-being = pleasure n快乐

  3. happiness index n幸福指数

  4. economic success = economic achievement n经济成就

  5. have large sums of money = own a great deal of wealth v 拥有财富

  6. have deep pockets = have money to burn v 财力雄厚

  7. wholesome physique and mentality n健康的身心

  8. is closely related to = is associated with 和……相关

  9. have little correlation to …… v和……不相关联

  10. …… is a more essential factor in achieving happiness ……是获得幸福更加重要的因素

  11. strengthen one’s sense of fulfillment v增强人的成就感

  12. earn respect and admiration from others v赢得别人的尊敬和羡慕

  13. fulfill one’s many wonderful dreams v实现诸多的美丽梦想

  14. travel all around the globe v环球旅行

  15. enjoy the delicious / delectable/ tasty foods in the world v享受世间美食

  老师原创句型语料库:

  1. Perhaps no issue has led to such an endless debate as to whether or not …… 也许没有什么像……一样引起无休止的争论。

  2. Standards towards happiness differ widely from person to person .人们对于幸福的标准是仁者见仁智者见智。

  3. Happiness lies, first of all, in health. 健康是幸福生活的本源。

  4. Under no circumstances can ignore the immense value of health management. 任何情况下不能忽视健康管理的巨大价值。

  5. Health enables one to brave the career challenges energetically and harmonize the family life optimistically 健康可以使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐。
老师原创范文赏析:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 +作家立场

  People have been pondering for years the connotation of true happiness. Perhaps no issue has led to such an end less debate as to whether or not large sums of money could directly bring people well-being. Standards towards happiness differ widely from person to person. My view is that the sense of well-being could derive from wealth, however, other more significant factors have more indispensable roles to play in enhancing one’s happiness index.

  二段:论证财富为何是幸福的源泉

  Indeed, happiness do closely relate to economic achievement to some extent because a great amount of wealth can make people’s life more enjoyable, comfortable and free. To be more specific, one can fulfill his many dreams such as receiving fine education and traveling around the globe if he or she has deep pocket. Still, economic success implies high social status, which can bring people the sense of happiness and even earn respect from others.

  三段:论证幸福更加重要的源泉

  Notwithstanding all that, there is no definite correlation between the amount of one’s wealth and his or her happiness index. Happiness,sometimes, does not depend on economic success but completely on wholesome physique and mentality. First, happiness lies in health. More precisely, wealth, fame, or status will be of little meaning if one fails to ensure his health. To illustrate, some affluent enterprisers have money to burn, yet, they are basically unhappy due to the deteriorating health condition and huge mental pressure. Further, health ensures career success and family harmony. In other words, health enables one to brave the career challenges energetically and harmonize the family life optimistically. Ultimately, those who enjoy good health must be confident and optimistic, their pleasant characters can help them enlarge circle of friends. The multiplication of close friends will brighten their spirit and sweeten their lives.

  尾段:亮明观点+总结理由

  In the final analysis, I re-affirm my conviction that happiness is not only related to economic success but also links to health, which is more significant. Only by means of owing desirable health condition can we enjoy the lifelong sense of pleasure although wealth sometimes indicates the source of happiness.
抽象类:

  In some countries, young people are not only richer but also safer and healthier than ever before. However, they are less happy. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? 在一些国家,年轻人更加富有,安全,健康,但是,他们还是不快乐,原因何在,如何解决?

  思路拓展:幸福的源泉

  1. 做自己喜欢的事情

  2. 学习的乐趣

  3. 朋友带来的乐趣

  4. 生活的简单轻松

  5. 梦想的实现

  年轻人不快乐的根源:

  客观上:

  1. 有些青少年来自单亲家庭,或者是暴力家庭,缺乏温暖和关爱,很难快乐。

  2. 应试教育和填鸭教学使很多成长中的年轻人不堪重负,更谈不上发展自己的兴趣爱好,放松休闲,因此,很多年轻人不快乐。

  主观上:

  1. 幸福感其实和自我的期待值有关,欲望好像是盐水,越喝越渴。有时候,年轻人想要提升自我,但是,又缺乏力量,想要后退,又不甘心,欲求不得的焦虑正是不快乐的根源之一。

  2. 罗素在论及快乐的时候提及朋友和爱好可以是快乐的重要源泉,因此,个人爱好很少以及交际圈很小的人,很难获得更多快乐。

  解决策略:

  1.父母承担对于子女的责任,为他们营造快乐健康的成长环境。

  2.教育者帮助学生们调整心态,同时,缓解学业负担,丰富校园活动。

  3.年轻人积极交友,培养乐观人生态度,发展个人爱好,获得更多快乐源泉。

  老师原创语料库:

  1. numerous youngsters = a great many teenagers = a number of young people n很多年轻人

  2. youngsters = teenagers = adolescents = the young = young adults = those who are in the formative years n年轻人

  3. acquire = attain = obtain v获得……

  4. well-being = pleasure = happiness n幸福

  5. feel cheerful = feel delighted = feel happy v 感到快乐

  拓展:remain cheerful in times of adversity v逆境中保持乐观

  拓展:see the sunny side v看到积极的一面

  6. feel gloomy = feel depressed = feel morose v 感到很郁闷

  7. as for sb = on the part of sb = on the side of sb v对于……来说

  8. such is human nature to do sth 去做 …… 是人之常情

  9. enlarge one’s circle of friends v扩大交友圈

  10. meet and make bunches of new friends v结识新朋友

  11. exam-oriented education n 应试教育

  12. exercise-stuffed teaching method n 填鸭教学方法

  13. efforts should be made by educators to do sth 教育者应该做出努力去……

  14. it is imperative for sb to do sth 去做 …… 对于某人来说是势在必行

  15. adjust one’s mentality to do sth v调整心态

  16. have a good state of mind v拥有良好心态

  17. get a clear perspective of oneself v对于自己有清晰的认知

  18. foster a variety of new hobbies v培养新的爱好

  19. declined sense of happiness n下降的幸福感

  20. improve one’s happiness index v提高幸福指数

  21. help students reduce the academic burden 帮助学生缓解学习压力

  22. confronted with the exam-oriented education, the young live under a pool of pressure in many countries 面对着应试教育,很多年轻人承载着巨大的压力

  23. The measures to reduce both educational and social pressure should be given to the young. 我们应该采取措施,帮助年轻人缓解来自教育和社会的压力

  24. add color to one’s dull routine of everyday life 给单调的生活增添乐趣

  25. It is up to us to find the ways and means to achieve that happiness each of us seek and desire 我们要自己寻找实现我们追求和渴望的幸福的方式。

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雅思作文素材运用汇总(2017)(3)

【健康类】

  Some people believe that to become the vegetarian is the only way to keep healthy. Do you agree or disagree? 有人认为:成为素食主义者是保持健康的唯一方式,是否认同?

  【点评】 本文主题是论证如何保持健康。

  【健康类】

  The government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others believe it is individuals’ responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 政府有责任保障人们的健康饮食,健康饮食是个人的责任,讨论两种观点,给出你的意见。

  【作家立场】 保持健康是个人和政府的责任,但是,个人应该承担更多的责任。(个人健康管理的方式就是加强锻炼、健康管理、合理饮食等)

  【点评】 文本主题是论证如此保持健康。

  【写作难点】

  1. 没有观点

  2. 没有语言

  3. 表达不精彩

  【写作策略】

  精彩的语料库的输入到输出。写文章好像盖楼房,需要的是图纸和原料。按照写作理解,就是谋篇布局+遣词造句。语料库就是打造完美范文的一块块砖,料,水泥和木头。这是最考验写作基本功的。雅思写作老师语料库是整合优秀的阅读资源和个性化的原创思想。

  【中国考生分析低分的原因解析】

  1. 模板和背诵的痕迹过重,让人不相信是原创作品。

  2. 没有文采,很多表达已经是陈词滥调。

  3. 基础薄弱,错误较多。

  【解析两个写作术语】

  pet words n小狗词汇——作家喜欢的词汇

  fossilization n化石主义——固定输入

  【雅思写作评分标准】

  ☆ 任务完成情况(Task Achievement)

  解析:内容(content)是否切题,立场(position)是否鲜明并得到有效阐释,结构(structure)是否有逻辑性。

  ☆ 连贯与衔接(Coherence and Cohesion)

  解析:段落之间的“启”、“承”、“转”、“合”可通过表顺序的过渡词完成。

  ☆ 词汇资源(Lexical Resource)

  解析:用词的精准可以加分。 词汇的精彩体现在表达的个性化以及多元化。

  ☆ 语法的多样性和准确性(Grammatical Range and Accuracy)

  解析:句子结构的准确性和丰富性;句子的长度和复杂性;用语的逻辑性和正式性。

  【雅思写作的5个步骤】

  (1)词汇替换:替换提问中的关键词汇。

  (2)主题观点:确立作家立场或者写作目的。

  (3)思路拓展:思考支持反驳或者解释解决的理由。

  (4)正文写作:正文写作准备好的语料库,做到灵活运用。

  (5)仔细检查:坚持行文逻辑;句法;词汇拼写。

  【让步反驳解析】:三分让步、七分反驳(观点不是完全正确的)

  【让步反驳话题的布局图】

  [首段]:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  [二段]:让步原题观点的合理性(最多二点;他人口吻;我的口吻;可以适度反驳)

  [三段]:让步原题观点之不合理(二点或者三点反驳)

  [尾段]:再次亮明观点 + 总结理由

  【作家立场】 为了保持健康,多食水果蔬菜也许是一种有效的方式,但是,不是最佳的和唯一的方式。

  【思路拓展】

  素食主义为何可以保持健康

  1. 素食主义者避免了糖分、脂肪、和过多的热量的摄入。

  2. 并且,水果蔬菜中含有丰富的维生素,因此,多食水果蔬菜真的是可以保持健康。但是,我想反驳的是:过度摄入水果蔬菜会导致营养的不均衡。

  素食主义为何不是保持健康的唯一方式

  1. 其实,保持健康,仅仅避免肉类的摄入不是最佳的方式。

  2. 第一,加强体育锻炼是很好的保持健康方式,规律的体育锻炼可以使人放松身心、增强人的免疫力、提高人的健康指数。

  3. 第二,劳逸结合是健康的生活方式的保障,因为,现代人面对激烈的竞争,很多人过度工作,这种生活方式其实潜移默化地对健康施加不良影响,因此,有效地休息例如安排旅行或者周末会友也会愉悦心情,甜美生活,有助于人们的健康管理。

  【老师语料库】

  1. Happiness lies,first of all,in health. 健康是幸福人生的本源。

  2. vegetarians = those who are keen on eating vegetables or fruits n素食主义者

  3. vegetarians =people who consciously avoid the intake of meat n素食主义者

  4. is the only way = is the sole method v 是唯一的方式

  5. keep healthy = keep fit = embark on a healthier lifestyle = have a wholesome lifestyle v保持健康

  【范文赏析】

  [首段]:背景介绍+作家立场

  Happiness lies,first of all,in health. Health enables us to brave career challenges energetically and harmonize family life optimistically. The awareness of a healthier lifestyle has been making numerous people alter their dietary habits, which explains the increase of vegetarians. My stand is that to eat fruits and vegetables might be an effective way in terms of keeping fit,however,it is not the best and only strategy.

  【解析】 My stand is that = my firm conviction is that =to voice my opinion 我认为……

  【拓展】 in terms of 在……的方面;就……而言

  [二段]:让步段

  Indeed, I have to concede that people who consciously avoid the intake of meat can, to some extent, help them embark on a wholesome lifestyle. More precisely, vegetarian eating habit helps people avoid excessive intake of sugar, fat and calorie. Meanwhile, rich nutrients and vitamins are contained in plenty of fruits and vegetables. What I want to rebut, however, is that too much consumption of fruits and vegetables might result in the imbalance of nutritional value

  【解析】 embark on a wholesome lifestyle v开始健康的生活方式

  【拓展】 What I want to rebut, however, is that…… 然而,我想反驳的是……

  [三段]:反驳段

  Virtually,to avoid eating meat leaves much to be desired as far as keeping fit is concerned. Other ways should be explored. First, strengthening the physical exercise is also a commendable way because regular physical activities help us relax our bodies and ease our minds. Hence, one’s immune system can be improved and one’s health index can be enhanced. Also, modern people usually have to face fierce competition and huge pressure deriving from either study or work. To stand out, numerous people burn the midnight oil, which undermines their health. In this sense, to strike a proper balance between rest and work can also ensure people’s health management. To illustrate, occupied workers or students should be urged to arrange holiday trip or friends reunion from time to time.

  【解析】 leaves much to be desired …… 远非令人满意

  【拓展】 burn the midnight oil = work far into the night 开夜车(为工作到深夜)

  [尾段]:再次亮明观点

  In closing,I re-affirm my conviction that regular sports activities and reasonable schedule will have indispensable roles to play in help people remain healthy although to reduce the intake of meat might work in some cases.

  【解析】 In closing,I re-affirm my conviction that …… 总之,我再次重申我方立场

  【拓展】 have indispensable roles to play in 在……中可以发挥不可缺少的作用
【健康类】:

  Staying healthy by playing sports and eating well should be an individual’s duty to society rather than a habit for personal benefits. Do you agree or disagree? 保持健康是个人对于社会的责任,但是,不是使个人受益的良好习惯,是否认同?

  相关提问:

  【健康类】:

  1. Some people believe that the government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others believe it is individuals’ responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 有人认为政府有责任保障人们的健康饮食,有人认为健康饮食是个人的责任,讨论两种观点,给出你的意见。

  2. Some people believe that improving public health should increase the number of sports facilities. But others believe that it has little effects and needs other measures should be taken. Discuss both views and give your own opinion 有人认为提高公众健康应该提高体育设施的数量,有人这种做法效果有限,应该采取其他方式,讨论两种观点,给出你的意见。(2009年2月28日)

  【头脑风暴导言】:

  失去你,拥有世界又如何,这个你,就是我们每人的健康管理。每天运动一小时,健康工作50年,幸福生活一辈子,这才是我们值得秉承的人生格言。

  个人保持健康,提高工作效率,创造社会财富,减少消耗社会医疗资源,因此,这是履行社会责任。

  赢的五个偏帮部首为: 亡、口、月、贝、凡。月字指的就是我们的健康管理,健康,使人精力充沛地应对学业、事业的挑战,乐观地实现家庭的和谐。财富不能保障健康,健康却可以创造财富。身心健康,家人无忧,生活快乐,因此,保持使人人受益,是应该培养并坚持的良好习惯。

  【文章布局】:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  二段:让步原题观点的合理性

  三段:反驳原题观点之不合理

  尾段:再次亮明观点 +(总结理由)

  【作家立场】: 保持健康是个人和政府的责任,但是,个人应该承担更多的责任。

  【思路拓展】:

  为何保持健康是履行社会责任:

  ① 保持身体健康是个人履行社会责任的体现,因为这减少了对于国家医疗资源的消耗,国家就有财政预算解决其他民生问题。

  ② 如果个人的健康没有保障,难以胜任工作挑战,亦无法为社会发展做出应有贡献。相反,健康的公民可以创造社会财富,为国家发展注入新鲜活力。因此,是个人社会责任的体现。

  为何保持健康是良好的个人习惯:

  ① 对于个人的利好:增强自信,减少忧虑,培养乐观人生态度。健康者通常为热爱运动者,通过运动可结实好友,这就意味着快乐源泉之增加。

  ② 对于家庭的利好:可以想象,个人健康状况令人担忧,家人必然痛苦和担忧(例如企业家和文体明星),因此,个人健康可以使人乐观地实现家庭的和谐。

  ③ 对于事业、学业的利好:个人健康可以提高学习和工作效率,使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战。

  【老师语料库】:

  1. keep fit = remain healthy = stay healthy v 保持健康

  2. have a reasonable health management v 有良好的健康管理

  3. …… can instill confidence into one’s heart = build up one’s self-confidence v ……可以增强人的自信

  4. strengthens one’s immune system v增强人的免疫系统

  5. enhance one’s health index v提高人的健康指数

  6. Happiness lies,first of all,in health 健康是幸福人生的本源。

  7. If citizens can strengthening physical exercise and keep a wholesome dietary habit, then their perfect health index can be maintained. In this sense, it will greatly diminish the consumption of social health medical resources. 如果公民可以加强体育锻炼,保持健康饮食,他们可以保持良好的健康指数。从这个意义上讲,这会减少社会医疗资源的消耗。

  8. Keeping fit is indispensable factor for improving people’s quality of life 保持健康对于提高人们的生活质量而言,是不可缺少的因素。

  9. It is unshakable duty of every individual to embark on a healthier lifestyle v开始健康的生活方式, 是人人不可推卸的责任。

  10. Health makes one brave career challenges energetically and harmonize family life optimistically. 健康使人经历充沛地应对事业的挑战,乐观地实现家庭和和谐。
 【范文赏析】:

  {首段}:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. However, people have been pondering, for many years, the significance of maintaining personal health without reaching any definite consensus. A popular belief is that personal health only serves the good of the community. As I see it,optimizing personal health could not only benefit the society,but importantly,conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity.

  【解析】:

  1. Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. 健康对于每个人,如同花香对于花朵。

  2. a popular belief is that ……一种流行的观点就是……

  3. optimizing personal health v 完善个人健康

  4. conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity v有助于个人生活,家庭和睦,事业辉煌

  {二段}:为何保持健康是尽到了社会责任

  Indeed, I have to concede that keeping fit could be of great benefits for a nation and therefore be deemed as the personal obligation to the community. In other words, As for the country,the increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. Also, health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. It is conceivable that the increase of healthy social citizens can help create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further prosperity of a nation.

  【解析】:

  1. could be of great benefits for a nation v对于国家有利好

  2. The increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. 健康公民的增加会减少社会公共医疗的消耗。

  3. Health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. 健康意味着健良好的心态和充沛的体能。

  4. create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further development of a nation v 创造巨大的价值,为国家的发展注入新鲜活力。

  {三段}:为何保持健康对于个人有利好

  Nevertheless,every individual could become the beneficiary of keeping fit too. First, a man with sound physique and mentality succeed better at work,respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. Secondly, health could, to a large extent, enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically. For example, many entrepreneurs or super stars usually suffer from various health-related problems due to excessive workload and huge mental pressure. It is conceivable that one’s poor health condition will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members. Last, remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study.

  【解析】:

  1. Every individual could become the beneficiary of …… 人人都可以成为……的受益者

  2. A man with sound physique and mentality people succeed better at work,respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. 身心健康者工作更有成效,积极应对压力,较少沮丧,可以实现更多个人目标。

  3. …… enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically. …… 使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战,以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐。

  4. …… will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members …… 不可避免地给健康带来巨大的痛苦

  5. Remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study. 保持健康使人恢复体能,清醒头脑,因此,提高工作和学习的效率。

  尾段:再次亮明观点:

  In closing, I re-affirm my conviction that keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. Therefore, embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us.

  【解析】:

  1. Keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. 保持健康,不仅仅是和社会责任相关,同时,于个人幸福相关,而后者,意义更加重要。

  2. Embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us. 培养健康的生活方式应该每个人应该坚持的终生的习惯。

  【全文点评】:

  本篇个性开篇,主题明确、逻辑清晰、细节饱满、词汇丰富、句型简洁,符合雅思写作评分标准,可为考生研读赏析之佳作,建议童鞋打造属于自己的原创范文。
【健康类】

  Scientists believe that eating fast food is harmful to one’s health. Some people think that education can help them change that bad habit. Others, however, argue that education does not work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 科学家认为吃快餐有害健康,有人认为教育可以帮助人们改变这个不良习惯,有人认为教育不起作用, 讨论两种观点。(2010年12月11日雅思考试题目 )

  【老师点评】讨论两种观点,可以使用第一人称口吻,也可以使用第三人称口吻。

  【作家立场】保障健康饮食,教育是起到一定的积极作用,但是,健康饮食不能仅仅依靠教育。

  【思路拓展】

  ①青少年是快餐的主要消费者,快餐含有过多的糖分、脂肪、热量,长期食用有害健康。所以,青少年应该成为教育的主体。

  ②为了减少快餐对于消费者的不良影响,除了教育以外,政府也该承担责任。例如,美国政府已经限制肯德基捆绑销售儿童套餐的商业行为。

  【范文赏析】

  【首段】背景介绍+ 作家立场

  So prevailing are the fast foods that some teenagers are in the habit eating junk foods nearly every week. From the perspective of some nutritionists, too much intake of sugar, calorie and fat is undoubtedly health-threatening, for fast food, in most cases, is low in nutritional value. People differ greatly in their views as to how to foster wholesome dietary habit. As I see it, educating the public about the dangers of unhealthy eating, regulating baneful sales and food advertisements to children and lowering the price of healthy foods should be used together to help people keep fit.

  【二段】

  Granted, one effective way to promote a healthy diet is to educate people about the potential risks of unhealthy diet. Modern people might opt for healthier meals and snacks if they are taught that fast foods are high in salt, fat and sugar. To illustrate, I myself changed my unwholesome eating habits after watching television programs on how to preserve health. Also, while it is of great significance to educate adult eater, schoolchildren should be main target for education because they are not only in their formative years but also the regular eaters of fast foods.

  【三段】

  In addition to education, other ways to promote healthy eating are not far to seek. First, methods should be adopted to strictly censor those junk food advertisement aiming at children. Meanwhile, bundle sale of children’ meals by giving out gift toys ought to be banned. Virtually, American has already enacted relevant legislations to restrict such sale promotion of KFC and Mcdonald's. Also, it is imperative for the governments to ensure that healthy foods are cheaper so that people could afford to buy the wholesome foods. Imaginably,the decreased price of fresh fruits and vegetable could enable more people to enjoy healthier foods.

  【尾段】

  Overall, education could aid people to change bad eating habits. However, it also works to restrain the improper publicity and sale of fast food restaurant as well as lower the price of wholesome foods

  【老师语料库】

  1. So prevailing are the fast foods that some children and youngsters are in the habit of eating fast foods nearly every week. 快餐是如此流行,以至于很多孩子或青少年现在有每周几乎吃快餐的习惯。

  【拓展】prevailing = prevalent = popular adj 流行的

  2. wholesome = healthy = sound adj健康的

  3. junk foods n垃圾食品

  4. alter one’s dietary habit = change one’s eating habit v 改变一个人的饮食习惯

  5. be detrimental to health = undermine one’s health v有害健康

  6. is a health-threatening practice v有害健康的做法

  7. be conducive to one’s health = conduce to one’s health = is beneficial to one’s health v有益健康

  8. keep fit = stay healthy v保持健康

  9. is low in nutritional value v营养价值很低

  10. contribute to obesity = give rise to= overweight = lead to fatness v导致肥胖

  11. bundle sale n捆绑销售

  12. avoid too much intake of sugar, calorie and fat v避免太多的糖分、脂肪、热量的摄入

  13. Healthy food should be made cheaper. 健康食品应价格低廉

  14. The advertising of junk foods aiming at children should be reasonably regulated 针对儿童的垃圾食品广告应该被合理规范

  15. inspire encourage people to eat natural foods v鼓励人们吃天然食品

  16. foster reasonable and regular dietary habit v培养健康规律的饮食习惯

  【拓展】foster = cultivate = develop v 培养

  17. make people have a deeper insight into how to acquire balanced nutrition v 加深人们对于获得均衡营养的洞察

  18. It is imperative for the government to call on wholesome dietary habit. 号召健康饮食,对于政府而言势在必行。

  19. Personal importance should be attached to the sanitation of eating and drinking 个人应该重视饮食卫生。

  20. On no account can we ignore the immense value of health management, no matter how busy we are. 无论我们多忙,我们不能忽视健康管理的巨大价值。

  【拓展练笔题目】

  People should look after their health as a duty to the society they live in rather than personal benefits. Do you agree or not agree? 保持健康是尽到了社会责任,不是对于个人有益,是否认同?

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【工作类】多元职业和候鸟生活的利弊

  An amount of people today change their career and place of residence several times during their lives. Is this positive or negative to development?很多人在一生中不断改变自己的居住地以及工作,是好还是不好?(2013年10月19日)

  【相关考题】

  Many parents these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think advantages of the development outweigh its disadvantages? 很多父母现在在异国他乡工作,会带上自己的家人,是否利大于弊?

  【作家立场】多元职业和候鸟生活利大于弊。

  【头脑风暴】

  有谁愿躲在避风的港口,宁愿波涛汹涌的自由,风景在别处,他乡是故乡。候鸟是一种最精壮的鸟,它不安居一地,以迁徙为乐。对于随性随缘,追逐生命质量的人而言,落地处即是家乡,四海内皆可交友,他们深思熟虑地选择了自己渴望的生活方式,并且,愿意承担一切,仅仅为自由飞翔的梦想。

  【思路拓展】

  ①很多的年轻人被更好的工作机会和更现代的都市生活吸引,喜欢选择心仪的居住地工作和生活,而不是久居故土。

  ②异地择业生活,意味着不断地迎接挑战,多种职业技能学习的机会,丰富的工作的经验的积累,广阔的人脉资源。于生活而已,人可体味持久的新鲜感,找到自己真正喜爱的适合的城市。

  ③无可否认,离开家乡,家庭纽带的分解以及友谊的淡化不可避免,因为空间的隔离使得老友家人之间交流和交往的机会减少。或许有人认为,候鸟生活只是适合年轻时代,候鸟式的生活很难保障人的稳定的生活和持久的幸福感,但是,我想反驳的是,即使迁移,人亦可以成家立业,娶妻生子,广泛交友,感受幸福。
【范文赏析】

  【首段】 背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  Sure enough,with the availability of new technology, people may get a reasonable career in any favorite cities without considering regional limits. No matter where one dwells in, he or she can keep contact with their family members via the Internet or airplane timely. One of the traits of modern way of working is that people enjoy more freedom in terms of selecting their dream jobs and places of residence. To voice my opinion, the merits of free job selection and multiple career choice prevail over its possible downsides.

  【二段】 多元职业和候鸟生活之利好的展开

  Seen from positive aspects, many benefits can be acquired. First,multiple career choice and constant change of residence means a broad range of working experience and constant refreshment. Meanwhile, one can become more talented and competent by taking up various jobs. Also, regular change of jobs makes one excel professionally and living in different cities greatly enriches one’s experience of the world. Hence,one can have brighter career and enjoy precious memory in the future. Last,to embark on more jobs in diverse cities enables one to have better personal resources. A well-connected interpersonal network,to some extent, indicates more splendid opportunities of job-promotion, comfortable salary and even the room for career achievement.

  【三段】多元职业和候鸟生活之利好的展开

  On the downsides, some problems might ensue. For a start, the decomposition of family bonds is an unavoidable risk due to the spatial separation. Imaginably, the face-to-face opportunities of communicating with relatives and friends will be reduced if people live too far. Further, every individual should assume the responsibility of getting married and starting his career, it might be hard for people to obtain the sense of well-being and enjoy a kind of stable life provided that they change place of working too quickly.

  【尾段】 再次亮明观点

  In closing,my stand is that it is up to us to find the means to achieve that happiness each of us long for, however, young people should be inspired to explore the unknown. That is the best way for them to deepen their insight into what they are hoping to do with their lives. Finding jobs and experiencing life in diverse cities exert many positive impacts on many people, especially for those who dare to challenge themselves.

  【经典语料】

  1. Young adults are generally intoxicated by splendid job opportunities and modernized lifestyle. 很多的年轻人是被更好的工作机会和更现代的都市生活吸引。

  2. migrant lifestyle 候鸟式的生活

  3. indicate long-lasting sense of refreshment 意味着持久的新鲜感

  4. acquire various vocational skills 学习多样的职业技能

  5. accumulate rich working experience and establish well-connected interpersonal network 积累丰富的工作的经验,建立广阔的人脉资源

  6. spatial separation 空间的分离

  7. familiar circle of friends 熟悉的朋友圈

  8. the decomposition of family bonds 家庭纽带的分解

  9. get married and carve out career 成家立业

  10. It is up to us to find the means to achieve that happiness each of us long for 我们自己要寻找自己渴望的幸福的方式。


【工作类】人们难以平衡生活和事业的原因和解决策略

  Currently,many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives, what are the reasons and how to solve it? 现在,一些人难以平衡工作和生活的其他部分,原因何在,如何解决?(2012年3月8日)

  【头脑风暴】

  “我只想按照自己内心的想法去生活,为何这也如此艰难? ”有时候,我们想要上升,却又缺乏力量,我们想要后退,又不甘心,欲求而不得的焦躁,正是人生的困顿所在。“吾欲乎遑遑欲何之。”我的心啊,你为何如此不安宁,我的人生,你到底要走向哪里?只是,无论生活如何困顿、迷茫,只要我们还在为梦想奋力的路上,明天的太阳就一定是美丽的。

  【写作目的】本篇将会探究下人们未能处理家庭和生活矛盾的原因,再提出解决策略。

  【思路拓展】

  人们难以平衡工作和生活的原因解读:

  ①现代人对于生活的欲求更多,人,若想专业上脱颖而出,事业上高歌猛进,就要比常人努力,因此,一个人在工作中花费的时间越多,一个可以分配给家庭生活、健康管理和个人爱好的时间就越少。

  ②工作狂的现象可以被归结为工作的压力和竞争的激烈,多数情况下,人想要事业中出类拔萃,就要奋发图强,因此,很多职场新人只能全心工作。

  人们努力平衡工作和生活的解决策略:

  ① 企业应帮助职员缓压,建立理性的工作制,提倡健康的工作方式,毕竟,无论工作学习,勤奋高效才是我们应努力追求的。

  ② 对于个人而言,我们应该转变心态,事业的成功不是人生唯一目的,努力工作是为了去创造和享受美好人生, 但是,工作不应成为负累。无论多忙,人应牢记:家庭生活和健康管理也是重要的,我们不该把没有完成的工作带回家,也应规律运动、发展爱好、拓宽交友圈。

  【范文赏析】

  【首段】 背景介绍 + 问题影响 + 写作目的

  Alarmingly, there is a growing awareness that a great many employees find it hard to strike a proper balance between career and life, some people fail to care about the health management and the cultivation of new hobby. The failure of tackling the tense relationship between career development and private life will have a really adverse influence. This essay aims to explore the reasons why it is far from easy to perfectly balance the job and life and then present solutions

  【解析】

  1. Alarmingly, there is a growing awareness that …… 令人担忧的是,人们渐渐认识到……

  2. it is far from easy to do sth 做……很难

  3. The failure of tackling the tense relationship between career development and private life will have a really adverse influence. 未能合理安排处理事业和个人生活的确带来很多不利影响。

  【二段】人们难以平衡生活和事业的原因解读

  The potential reasons of tense relationship between career and personal life are manifold. First, to zero in on career can be mainly owed to one’s infinite desire for life. More precisely, many young people desire to outshine others in their careers. To fulfill their rosy dreams, they have to work extremely hard. Thereby, the more time one spends on career, the less time one can allocate to other activities such as family life, health management or personal hobbies. Also, excessive workload and fierce competition that is why numerous young adults have to fully focus on jobs. More precisely,A new employee is sure to be eliminated by the hot competition if he or she slackens efforts at self-improvement.

  【解析】

  1. To zero in on career can be mainly owed to one’s infinite desire for life. 全心专注于事业可以被归结为人们对于生活的无尽渴望。

  2. A new employee is sure to be eliminated by the hot competition if he or she slackens efforts at self-improvement. 如果职场新人在自我提升方面有所放松,他注定会被激励的竞争所淘汰。

  【三段】 人们努力平衡工作和生活的解决策略

  Considering the conflict between career and life, it is high time that we adopted effective measures. Initially, it is imperative for the relevant companies to reduce the heavy workload and create healthy work style. Virtually, to popularize a reasonable mode of work not only brings happiness to the workers but also enhances the efficiency of working. Also, efforts should be made by everyone to change their opinion towards career. Specifically, people should clearly know that success in career will never be the sole aim of life, to work diligently is to create and savor wonderful life. No matter how busy one might be, one should always bear in mind that family life tops all and he or she should never bring unfinished working tasks to home.

  【解析】

  1. Considering the conflict between career and life, it is high time that we adopted effective measures. 考虑到事业和生活的矛盾,我们理应采取一些有效的措施。

  2. Also, efforts should be made by everyone to change their opinion towards career. 个人应该努力改变职业观。

  3. To work diligently is to create and savor wonderful life. 努力工作是为去创造和品位精彩人生。

  4. Family life tops all. 家庭生活最重要

  5. He or she should never bring unfinished working tasks to home. 我们不应该把未完的工作带回家。

  【尾段】 作家立场

  In closing,my stand is that it is no easy task to keep a appropriate balance between career and life at times, however, one should make efforts to realize this balance.

  【解析】

  1. in closing,my stand is that …… 总之,我的立场是……

  2. it is no easy task to do sth v做……绝非易事

  3. at times adv 有时候

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雅思作文素材运用汇总(2017)(5)

【犯罪类】

  A recent newspaper article reports that a 14-year-old boy seriously destroyed school got a punishment to clean streets instead of sending to prison. Do you think young criminals should be sent to jail? 报道显示:14岁的年轻人校园违规后会受到做清洁工作的处罚而非服刑,你认为少年犯是否应该被送进监狱?

  【考题点评】

  开年总是伴随新题出现,规律不变,预测有难度。然而,题库有限,恒热不变。本场为全新角度,却是旧题改写,和老师预测犯罪类第二题极其相似。

  【小鹏预测】

  【犯罪类】

  1. Research suggests that majority of criminals who send to prison would commit crimes when set free, what do you think of this case? What can be done to solve this problem? 研究显示:大多数刑满释放人员会再次犯罪,原因何在,如何解决?

  2. Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree? 有人认为:将犯罪分子送入监狱不是最好的解决犯罪问题的方法,教育和工作培训是更好的方法,是否同意?

  【相关题目】

  Some people think the only purpose of prison is to punish crimes, others think it has other functions. Discuss both views and give your opinion? 有人认为刑罚的唯一的目的是严惩犯罪,有人认为刑罚还有其他功能,讨论两种观点,给出你的意见? (2013年2月16日)

  Some people think law-breakers should be sent to prison, however, others think that better talents among those should be made to work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion 有人认为违法者应该被送进监狱,有人认为有才艺的犯罪分子应该被鼓励去工作,讨论两种观点,给出你的意见?(2009年9月17日)

  【头脑风暴】

  有谁年少不痴狂,少年犯罪某种意义上是一种“激情犯罪。”少年犯罪更多的是冲动犯罪、过失犯罪、被诱导犯罪。 青少年涉世不深,模仿力强,定力不足,因此他们才常常有犯罪的“热血”和“冲动”。他们耍勇斗狠,争强好胜,风风火火闯九州,该出手时就出手,尤其是当一些少年犯来自暴力或单亲家庭,亦或是受到外界的不良影响之时。人言:“一失足成千古恨。”我说:“人生长路漫漫,只要你反思人生,向上向善,人生就还有峰回路转的余地。”

  【作家立场】尚未成年者若仅是校园违规,鼓励他们服务社区或者做清洁工作是可取的,然而,对于惯性犯罪者,重罪轻罚是不可取的。

  【思路拓展】

  1. 商业化大众传媒的不良影响,暴力或单亲家庭的不良成长环境,或者,青少年本身的好奇心和模仿力强都是他们误迷途的根源,因此,对于初次犯罪者或者过失犯罪者,理应给予他们改过自新的机会,鼓励少年犯服务社区,清扫街道都不失为可行的措施。

  2. 然而,对于少年犯罪,也不能固定刑罚。我们还应该考虑他们恶行的影响和动机,有些“性攻击”,“校园欺凌”类的少年犯已经给受害者带来巨大痛苦,造成严重的社会负面影响,因此,重罪轻罚亦不可取,只有适度量刑才能威慑潜在犯罪分子、体现法律公正、安慰受害者家属。
【范文赏析】

  【首段】 背景介绍 + 作家立场

  Alarmingly, various misdeeds among teenagers ranging from school bullying or sex assault are now becoming big headaches in many countries. Juvenile delinquency not only afflicts the victims but also jeopardizes the community. Many efforts have already been made on how to crack down juvenile crime, but, the effect is far from satisfying. This essay aims to represent relevant measures of penalties.

  【解析】

  1. juvenile delinquency = teenage crime = youth crime n青少年犯罪

  2. afflict = agonize = distress v 使痛苦

  3. jeopardize the community = endanger the society v 危害社会

  4. crack down juvenile crime v降低青少年犯罪

  5. measures of penalty = measures of punishment n 惩罚措施

  【二段】 对于初次犯罪者或过失犯罪者的处罚措施:

  Nobody is innate perpetrator,during the journey of life,those who are in the formative years are,sometimes,derailed by manifold causes such as the negative influence of negative mass media, the disadvantaged family background or external factors. In this sense, stricter penalty for the first offenders, unintentional lawbreakers is far from rational, especially when taking the teenagers’ immature mentality into account. Virtually, appropriate punishment is commendable, to motivate those juvenile offenders to serve the community or sweeping the street can be reasonable measures.

  【解析】

  1. Nobody is innate perpetrator. 人性本善

  2. In this sense, stricter penalty for the first offenders, unintentional lawbreakers is far from rational, especially when taking the teenagers’ immature mentality into account. 因此,对于初犯者或者过失犯罪者,重罚远非理性,尤其当我们考虑到他们不成熟的心智的时候。

  3. To motivate those juvenile offenders to serve the community or sweeping the street can be reasonable measures. 鼓励少年犯服务社区或者清扫街道都是合理的措施。

  【解析】sweep v打扫(尤其是用大柄扫把清扫街道)

  【拓展】The economic crisis is sweeping across the world. 经济危机正在席卷全球。

  【三段】 为何不能固定刑罚,其他处罚措施有哪些:

  Notwithstanding all that,taking the effects of a misconduct and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for ensuring justice of the law. There should not be fixed punishment for all youth crime. Some misdeeds, for example, school bullying or sex assaults will inevitably distress the sufferers and endanger the society. Hence, light penalty for felony is unwise. Conversely, stricter punishment for hardened criminals will not only embody the justice of law but also exert a deterrent effect on those potential malefactors.

  【解析】

  1. a prerequisite n一种必要条件

  2. Taking the effects of misconduct and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for ensuring justice of the law. 考虑到犯罪的影响和动机是缺乏法律公正的先决条件。

  3. School bullying or sex assaults will inevitably distress the sufferers and endanger the society. 性攻击或校园欺凌会不可避免地伤害受害者,危及社会安定。

  4. Light penalty for felony is unwise. 重罪轻罚是不明智的。

  5. Stricter punishment for hardened criminals will not only embody the justice of law but also exert a deterrent effect on those potential malefactors. 对于重刑犯的严厉处罚不仅体现法律公正,而且,可以震慑潜在的犯罪分子。

  【尾段】总结立场

  To sum up,there is no simple resolution for such a complicate social problem,it is reasonable to expect that the combination of these suggestions may be needed. Custom-tailored penalty may be the best strategy for each teenage crime.

  【解析】

  Custom-tailored penalty may be the best strategy for each teenage crime 对于每一种少年犯罪行为的量体裁衣的处罚措施也许才是最好的策略。

  【创造感言】

  本篇思维锋利如刀,文笔行云流水。老师每篇文本以亮剑的标准要求自己,力求完美,不留余地。 唯有厚积薄发,才能一飞冲天。江河浩瀚,始于点滴。千里之行,始于足下,我们要习惯像蚂蚁一样,聚沙成塔。

  【经典语料】

  1. the custom-made penalty n量体裁衣的处罚措施

  2. violate the law = perpetrate the law v违反法律

  3. conduct ant-social offences v 做出反社会行为

  4. arouse one’s violent impulse v诱发了人的暴力的冲动

  5. enable those who are led astray to make compensation for their misconducts v使那些误入迷途者对于他们的过失做出补偿

  6. reflect on their evil lives v反思他们罪恶的人生

  7. As for those hardened teenage criminals, the government should be urged to impose stricter penalty on them so that other potential young law-breakers can be deterred. 对于青少年惯犯而言,政府应该加大惩罚措施,这样可以震慑潜在的犯罪分子。

  8. So immature and inexperienced are some youngsters that they tend to blindly imitate what they have seen, especially when they expose to pornographic movies and violent on-line games. 一些年轻人是如此不成熟,缺乏经验,以至于他们会盲目地效仿他们看到的一切,尤其是当他们接触到色情电影和暴力游戏的时候。

  9. In this sense, their cause of committing crimes can be owed to the negative influence of the mass media. 因此,他们的犯罪原因可以被归结为商业化大众传媒的不良影响。

  10. The young prisoners should be inspired and educated to serve the community to compensate for their misdeeds, sweeping the street can be a good in case in point. 少年犯应该被鼓励和教育去做社区服务,以弥补他们的犯罪行为,清洁街道也许就是很好的方法。

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【观点类】
  Now,in many countries women are able to join the armed forces on the equal basis of men. However,some people think only men should be members of the army, navy and Air Force. To what extent do you agree or disagree?在一些国家,女性同男性一样可以参军,有人认为,只有男性应该参军,你在多大程度上同意这个观点?(2016年5月19日)
  【相关考题】
  ① Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 一些人认为女性应该在国家的警察或军队中扮演与男性平等的角色,而另外一些人则认为女性不适合这些工作,讨论双方观点并且给出你的观点。(2011年2月19日)
  ② In many countries women are not able to join the army. But some people think women should be a member of the army, navy and air force. Do you agree or disagree? 在很多国家,女性不准许参军,很多人认为女性应该被准许参加陆军,海军和空军,你是否认同?(2003年9月20日)
  【头脑风暴】
  1.曾有新闻报道美丽女警,因为职业的原因恋爱难,警察的职业身份,把相亲的男孩子都吓跑了。
  2. 在这样一个性别平等,至少是呼吁性别平等的世界上,女性的各项权利正在得到广泛的尊重。在男权社会里,女性被认为是弱势群体。传统上讲,军警行业都是由男性主导的,因此,再谈及到女性是否适合军警行业的时候,仁者见仁,智者见智。
  【作家立场】
  女性从事军警职业完全是可行的合理的,其实,世界上很多国家拥有优秀的女兵女警,但是,她们的工作要适合其性别的特征和优势,例如,女性在军队中应该更多地从事文职或是心理或是医疗工作。同时,女性从事军警职业,其个人意愿应该被充分尊重。
  【思路拓展】
  反对女性参军
  ① 军人或是警察是高危职业,因此,不适合女性,设想,如果女性从事刑侦工作,那么她们不仅不能有效破案,而且这份工作还有可能威胁她们的安全。 同时,军人就有上战场的责任,在真实的战争中,女兵从体能和意志力方面,不如男性。
  ②从心理上来讲,不是所有的女性都喜欢参军及从事警察职业,从发展前景上来看,女性在军警行业的未来都不及男性光明,因为女性的精力会更多的放在照顾家庭和孩子身上。
  支持女性参军
  ①女性从军或者扮演女警角色不是没有其道理,保家卫国,维护社会安宁,人人有责,女性也不例外。
  ② 选择自己喜欢的职业,人人应该享有均等的权利,禁止女性入伍及从警是对女性选择自己喜欢的事业的基本权利的公然侵犯。
  ③ 女性从事警察职业或者是从军,可以发挥其性别优势,因为女性心思缜密,天性温柔。例如,女性的被侵害(来自性侵案)者应该由女警来安慰,在战争时期,女性医务人员可以给病员提供更好的情感安慰及精心的照料。
  【基础语料】
  1. to join the army =to enroll oneself in the army=to go into the army=to enlist in the army 参军
  2. is allowed to join the army 被准许参军
  3. gender equality 性别平等
  4. sex discrimination 性别歧视
  5. the weaker sex 女性/ 弱者
  6. male-dominated society 男权化社会
  7. army and police 军警
  8. protect one's home and defend one's country 保家卫国
  9. comparative advantage比较优势
  10. attentiveness and gentleness 缜密和温柔
  11. suffer=victims 受害者
  12. the rape case 性侵犯案件
  13. spiritual comfort and emotional support 精神安慰和情感支持
  14. highly risky career = extremely dangerous profession高危职业
  15. criminal investigation 刑侦工作
  16. crack a criminal case 破案
  17. is prone to get injured 容易受伤
  18. non-military jobs 文职工作
  19. curative activity 医疗工作
  20. individual propensity = personal willingness 个人意愿
  【句型语料】
  1. This is a world of gender equality, or, at least, a world calling for so. 这是一个性别平等,至少是呼吁性别平等的世界。
  2. When it comes to whether or not females should be allowed to serve the army, people hold divergent views. 当谈及到女性是否应该被允许参军的时候,人们观点分歧
  3. The prospects of female policeman or soldiers is far from bright. 女性军警的前景暗淡。
  4. It is every individual’s inalienable and equal right to pursue his or her dream career. 选择自己喜欢的职业,人人应该享有均等的,不可被剥夺的权利。
  5. To forbid females from enrolling themselves in the army is an obvious infringement of their basic right of opting for their favorite jobs. 禁止女性入伍及从警是对女性选择自己喜欢的事业的基本权利的公然侵犯。
  6. Female soldiers can fully demonstrate their comparative advantages because women are more likely to be attentive and tender. 女性从军,可以发挥其性别优势,因为女性心思缜密,天性温柔。
  7. A case in point is that a female suffer from sex assault is better to be taken care of by policewomen. 例如:女性的被侵害者(来自性侵案) 应该由女警来处理。
  8. During the time of war, female medical staff can provide the injured with better spiritual comfort and intensive care. 在战争时期,女性医务人员可以给病员更好地提供情感支持及精心的照料。
  9. It is perfectly preferable and feasible to encourage females to enlist in the army.女性从事军警职业完全是可行的合理的。
  10. A woman’s personal willingness should be fully respected in terms of joining the army and police女性从事军警职业,其个人意愿应该被充分尊重。




【观点类】
  Now,in many countries women are able to join the armed forces on the equal basis of men. However,some people think only men should be members of the army, navy and Air Force. To what extent do you agree or disagree?在一些国家,女性同男性一样可以参军,有人认为,只有男性应该参军,你在多大程度上同意这个观点?(2016年5月19日)
  【相关考题】
  ① Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 一些人认为女性应该在国家的警察或军队中扮演与男性平等的角色,而另外一些人则认为女性不适合这些工作,讨论双方观点并且给出你的观点。(2011年2月19日)
  ② In many countries women are not able to join the army. But some people think women should be a member of the army, navy and air force. Do you agree or disagree? 在很多国家,女性不准许参军,很多人认为女性应该被准许参加陆军,海军和空军,你是否认同?(2003年9月20日)
  【头脑风暴】
  1.曾有新闻报道美丽女警,因为职业的原因恋爱难,警察的职业身份,把相亲的男孩子都吓跑了。
  2. 在这样一个性别平等,至少是呼吁性别平等的世界上,女性的各项权利正在得到广泛的尊重。在男权社会里,女性被认为是弱势群体。传统上讲,军警行业都是由男性主导的,因此,再谈及到女性是否适合军警行业的时候,仁者见仁,智者见智。
  【作家立场】
  女性从事军警职业完全是可行的合理的,其实,世界上很多国家拥有优秀的女兵女警,但是,她们的工作要适合其性别的特征和优势,例如,女性在军队中应该更多地从事文职或是心理或是医疗工作。同时,女性从事军警职业,其个人意愿应该被充分尊重。
  【思路拓展】
  反对女性参军
  ① 军人或是警察是高危职业,因此,不适合女性,设想,如果女性从事刑侦工作,那么她们不仅不能有效破案,而且这份工作还有可能威胁她们的安全。 同时,军人就有上战场的责任,在真实的战争中,女兵从体能和意志力方面,不如男性。
  ②从心理上来讲,不是所有的女性都喜欢参军及从事警察职业,从发展前景上来看,女性在军警行业的未来都不及男性光明,因为女性的精力会更多的放在照顾家庭和孩子身上。
  支持女性参军
  ①女性从军或者扮演女警角色不是没有其道理,保家卫国,维护社会安宁,人人有责,女性也不例外。
  ② 选择自己喜欢的职业,人人应该享有均等的权利,禁止女性入伍及从警是对女性选择自己喜欢的事业的基本权利的公然侵犯。
  ③ 女性从事警察职业或者是从军,可以发挥其性别优势,因为女性心思缜密,天性温柔。例如,女性的被侵害(来自性侵案)者应该由女警来安慰,在战争时期,女性医务人员可以给病员提供更好的情感安慰及精心的照料。


 【基础语料】
  1. to join the army =to enroll oneself in the army=to go into the army=to enlist in the army 参军
  2. is allowed to join the army 被准许参军
  3. gender equality 性别平等
  4. sex discrimination 性别歧视
  5. the weaker sex 女性/ 弱者
  6. male-dominated society 男权化社会
  7. army and police 军警
  8. protect one's home and defend one's country 保家卫国
  9. comparative advantage比较优势
  10. attentiveness and gentleness 缜密和温柔
  11. suffer=victims 受害者
  12. the rape case 性侵犯案件
  13. spiritual comfort and emotional support 精神安慰和情感支持
  14. highly risky career = extremely dangerous profession高危职业
  15. criminal investigation 刑侦工作
  16. crack a criminal case 破案
  17. is prone to get injured 容易受伤
  18. non-military jobs 文职工作
  19. curative activity 医疗工作
  20. individual propensity = personal willingness 个人意愿
  【句型语料】
  1. This is a world of gender equality, or, at least, a world calling for so. 这是一个性别平等,至少是呼吁性别平等的世界。
  2. When it comes to whether or not females should be allowed to serve the army, people hold divergent views. 当谈及到女性是否应该被允许参军的时候,人们观点分歧
  3. The prospects of female policeman or soldiers is far from bright. 女性军警的前景暗淡。
  4. It is every individual’s inalienable and equal right to pursue his or her dream career. 选择自己喜欢的职业,人人应该享有均等的,不可被剥夺的权利。
  5. To forbid females from enrolling themselves in the army is an obvious infringement of their basic right of opting for their favorite jobs. 禁止女性入伍及从警是对女性选择自己喜欢的事业的基本权利的公然侵犯。
  6. Female soldiers can fully demonstrate their comparative advantages because women are more likely to be attentive and tender. 女性从军,可以发挥其性别优势,因为女性心思缜密,天性温柔。
  7. A case in point is that a female suffer from sex assault is better to be taken care of by policewomen. 例如:女性的被侵害者(来自性侵案) 应该由女警来处理。
  8. During the time of war, female medical staff can provide the injured with better spiritual comfort and intensive care. 在战争时期,女性医务人员可以给病员更好地提供情感支持及精心的照料。
  9. It is perfectly preferable and feasible to encourage females to enlist in the army.女性从事军警职业完全是可行的合理的。
  10. A woman’s personal willingness should be fully respected in terms of joining the army and police女性从事军警职业,其个人意愿应该被充分尊重。



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[忆1012 1113——/6.29] [婚礼8.29][周年11.04]Ugly people and more troubl.
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雅思作文素材运用汇总(2017)(7)
【环保类】
  In many countries, there is no enough recycling of waste materials (eg. paper, glass, cans).What are the reasons and how to solve it ? 很多国家,废料的循环利用不尽如人意,原因何在,如何解决?
  【头脑风暴】
  废料处置以及再循环利用,比较日本和中国,日本做的更好:分类处理生活垃圾,人们有环保意识,节能意识,废料对于环境的污染很少,废料得到充分的循环利用。相反,中国做得不尽如人意。有些人缺乏环保意识,媒体的宣传力度不足,政府对于乱丢生活的垃圾的现象也没有明确的规范。同时,废料处理基地和废料处理技术也有待改善。
  【范文赏析】
  {首段}:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 写作目的
  Recycling the waste and developing regenerated materials is a link that is essential for the national economic construction. Alarmingly, it is not rare to see that litterbugs almost appear in every corner of individual city. Even worse, the failure to properly recycling wastes will pose a threat to the sustainable development of natural resources. This essay aims to ascertain the reasons and solutions.
  【解析】
  1. Recycling the waste and developing regenerated materials is a link that is essential for the national economic construction.收旧利废,发展再生资源是国民经济建设中一个不可缺少的环节。
  2. Alarmingly, it is not rare to see that litterbugs almost appear in every corner of individual city. 令人担忧的是,每个城市的每个地区几乎都有乱扔垃圾的人。
  3. The failure to properly recycling wastes will pose a threat to the sustainable development of natural resources. 不能有效地循环垃圾会对于自然资源的可发展造成严重的威胁。
  【亮点】
  1. is essential for 对于……是重要的
  2. it is not rare to see that …… 很常见的是……
  3. pose a threat to …… 对……造成威胁
  {二段}:人们为何未能废料循环利用
  Indeed, what some people are doing is wasting precious natural resources and disposing of garbage randomly. The reasons why recycling waste materials leaves much to be desired are not far to seek. First, some cities fail to establish enough recycling sites to collect and tackle waste materials. Meanwhile, some countries lack efficient techniques in terms of waste treatment. Another major reason is that some people have little knowledge about how to deal with life waste or they simply lack eco-friendly consciousness.
  【解析】
  1. Some cities fail to establish enough recycling sites to collect and arrange waste materials. 一些城市未能够建立足够的回收站去收集和处理废料。
  2. Some people have little knowledge about how to deal with life waste or they simply lack eco-friendly consciousness. 人们缺乏怎样处理生活垃圾的知识或者他们仅仅是缺乏一种环保的意识。
  【亮点】
  1. …… leave much to be desired ……远非令人满意
  2. in terms of 在……方面,就……而言


{三段}:如果有效地展开废料循环利用
  Considering the severity of this issue, some effective measures should be adopted. First,relevant departments of an urban government are expected to make an overall plan and rational arrangement for establishing a collecting and purchasing network to promote the recycling of waste materials. Likewise,attempts should be made to by scientist to explore and popularize efficient and eco-friendly techniques of recycling wastes. Further, strengthening the publicity to raise the consciousness of cherishing the natural resources also works. Eventually, the responsibility should be given to every individual. The public should be urged to use recycled products, install energy-efficient and water-saving appliances, separate solid wastes.
  【解析】
  1. Attempts should be made by scientists to explore and popularize efficient and eco-friendly techniques of recycling wastes. 科学家们应该努力去研发和普及高效环保的废料循环技术。
  2. The public should be urged to use recycled products, install energy-efficient and water-saving appliances, carry out separate collection of wastes. 我们应该督促民众去使用再生物品,安装节水、节能设备,实行垃圾分类收集。
  【亮点】
  1. attempts should be made to do sth 我们应该努力做……
  2. …… also works ……同样是起作用的
  {尾段}:亮明观点 + 总结理由
  Overall, it is no easy task to effectively handle and recycle wastes. Only when concerted endeavors are made by the government, the scientists,the mass media and every individual can this thorny social issue be resolved perfectly.
  【老师语料库】
  1. Some city-dwellers lack the awareness of recycling wastes effectively. 一些城市居民,缺乏有效地循环废料的意识。
  2. The government should be urged to impose tougher penalties on environmentally damaging behaviors. 政府应该给督促去处罚破坏环境的行为。
  3. The public should be educated to foster the awareness of valuing the natural resource 人们应该被教育去培养珍惜自然资源的意识。
  4. Proper measures should be timely adopted to turn those litterbugs into environmentally conscious people. 应该采取适当的措施将那些乱扔垃圾的人变成自觉的环境保护者。
  5. The public should be educated to raise their awareness of environmental protection. 我们应该教育人们提高他们的环保意识。
  【分析问题解决问题话题句型拓展】
  1. it is an universal phenomenon that …… 是一个很普遍的现象
  2. it is no easy task to do sth,however,something must be done. 做……不是容易的事情, 但是,我们必须要采取一些措施。
  3. efforts should be made by sb to do sth v某人努力去做……
  4. it is imperative for the government to do sth v政府做……是势在必行的
  5. it is unshakable obligation of every individual to do sth v去做……人人有责
  6. the reasons why …… are manifold ……的原因是多样的
  7. first,…… can be owed to do sth 首先,……的原因可被给归结为……
  8. another reason to be considered is that …… 另一个人原因是……
  9. last, …… is the root cause of …… 最后,…… 是……的根源
  10. concerted efforts should be made by ……,……,…… to do sth ……,……,和…… 应该共同努力去做……
 



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[忆1012 1113——/6.29] [婚礼8.29][周年11.04]Ugly people and more troubl.
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标题
  Introduction: (42 words)
  Now the chance of experiencing different lifestyles or imitating to speak a few words of other languages for fun is slim due to the disappearance of some cultures and languages. I think that superstitious cultures and languages behind modern times cannot survive(thesis statement).
  Body1 (112words)
  Once I visited Se ethnic minorities village, located on a hillside in south of China. To my disappointment, I did not feel a different thing about ethnic clothes, food or music. Ridiculously, an old villager said that the forefather of his race had been an embodiment of a fairy with a dog head and a human body! The old generations have been proud of being the descendants of the fairy; however, Generation Y may feel ashamed of that because they know exactly this is a superstitious myth and to be a dog's descendants is not a glorious thing.Apparently,the cultures basing on superstitious belief would be torn down by social progress(topic sentence).
  Body2(121words)
  Further more, a language without written methods may be replaced by advanced one(topic sentence). There are many parts of the world where people cannot write because they do not have their own written language. The only way they can preserve their history is to recount it as sagas handed down from one generation of storytellers to another. With the fast pace of globalization, international aid can be put forward to reach every corner of the world. Those underdeveloped or isolated areas could receive food, medicine and education. The advanced civilization has pervaded into those primitive cultures hence they have started to learn writing something by the means of the available language accompanied with aid. Therefore their original one would have disappeared.
  Conclusion (34words)
  In conclusion, the disappearance of some cultures or languages is not worth preventing. This is an unavoidable outcome of the global economic growth. Most importantly, people can enjoy more prosperity and social progress.
Computers are widely used in education and some people think teachers are not playing an important role in classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
  The 21st century is the period of information, in which computers will play an important role in every area of our lives. Recently, computer assisted education has become more and more popular in primary schools, high schools and colleges. The computer’s multimedia abilities make the classes lively and interesting. As a result, some people have said that teachers are no longer playing a significant role in classroom. I can hardly agree with the m.
  First, it is the teacher who creates the software used in class. For example, the software may be an outline of the teacher’s lecture. If you listen to some lectures, you will find that the lectures contain far more information than the multimedia software includes. While showing the class, most teachers will expand the knowledge extent, especially adding some latest discoveries and breakthroughs. So, the computer is just an assistant, which makes the class more vivid and clear. Teachers and students are the main part of a class.
  Second, computers cannot organize activities in class in place of teachers. For example, we often do some group work during classes, and it is the teachers who set the groups and control the time. After checking our homework, teachers will understand what the real weakness of students is, and adjust their classes to improve their teaching, while computers cannot.
  Moreover, the interaction between students and teachers is very useful. During the asking and answering of questions, students pose problems and find answers more clearly. But computers, now, have not that intelligence.
  All in all, although computer technology is developing very quickly and computers can solve more and more problems without people, teachers still play an important role in class. And I insist that, no matter how the technology develops, teachers will be in the front of the classroom forever
 Is it nature or nurture that plays a major role in the development of personality? What's your opinion?
  There has been an argument on personality and individual’s development for a long time. The key point of the dispute is which factor plays a more important role, genes or training after birth? In my opinion, the latter is the crucial complication, though genes are significant.
  Although genes have great effects on one’s personality, environment plays a more important role in his further development. Let’s take an experiment for instance. There was a research on a couple of identical twins who were born in a big city, but they were separated after birth. One was taken to a poor suburban area, while the other remained in the city. Fifteen years later, surely, the one in city grew tall, strong, extroverted and well educated. By contrast, the other was short, thin, introverted and nearly illiterate. This well demonstrates the importance of nurturing.
  In addition, education, especially early education, is another key factor.When children are very young, they try to imitate their parents’ behaviors, and run into some manners. After going to school, different education systems and even different courses students taking will make influence on their personalities and ideas. Students of science and technology subjects are good at logical thinking, while students of arts usually think in terms of imagine.
  As you can tell from my comments above, no one can choose his nature,but one can be greatly successful after striving for himself or being well educated. And no one can be successful relying on his genes without good environment. So, in my opinion, environmental influence and education will ultimately decide one’s personality and development.
 Computers are widely used in education and some people think teachers are not playing an important role in classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
  The 21st century is the period of information, in which computers will play an important role in every area of our lives. Recently, computer assisted education has become more and more popular in primary schools, high schools and colleges. The computer’s multimedia abilities make the classes lively and interesting. As a result, some people have said that teachers are no longer playing a significant role in classroom. I can hardly agree with the m.
  First, it is the teacher who creates the software used in class. For example, the software may be an outline of the teacher’s lecture. If you listen to some lectures, you will find that the lectures contain far more information than the multimedia software includes. While showing the class, most teachers will expand the knowledge extent, especially adding some latest discoveries and breakthroughs. So, the computer is just an assistant, which makes the class more vivid and clear. Teachers and students are the main part of a class.
  Second, computers cannot organize activities in class in place of teachers. For example, we often do some group work during classes, and it is the teachers who set the groups and control the time. After checking our homework, teachers will understand what the real weakness of students is, and adjust their classes to improve their teaching, while computers cannot.
  Moreover, the interaction between students and teachers is very useful. During the asking and answering of questions, students pose problems and find answers more clearly. But computers, now, have not that intelligence.
  All in all, although computer technology is developing very quickly and computers can solve more and more problems without people, teachers still play an important role in class. And I insist that, no matter how the technology develops, teachers will be in the front of the classroom forever


Is it nature or nurture that plays a major role in the development of personality? What's your opinion?
  There has been an argument on personality and individual’s development for a long time. The key point of the dispute is which factor plays a more important role, genes or training after birth? In my opinion, the latter is the crucial complication, though genes are significant.
  Although genes have great effects on one’s personality, environment plays a more important role in his further development. Let’s take an experiment for instance. There was a research on a couple of identical twins who were born in a big city, but they were separated after birth. One was taken to a poor suburban area, while the other remained in the city. Fifteen years later, surely, the one in city grew tall, strong, extroverted and well educated. By contrast, the other was short, thin, introverted and nearly illiterate. This well demonstrates the importance of nurturing.
  In addition, education, especially early education, is another key factor.When children are very young, they try to imitate their parents’ behaviors, and run into some manners. After going to school, different education systems and even different courses students taking will make influence on their personalities and ideas. Students of science and technology subjects are good at logical thinking, while students of arts usually think in terms of imagine.
  As you can tell from my comments above, no one can choose his nature,but one can be greatly successful after striving for himself or being well educated. And no one can be successful relying on his genes without good environment. So, in my opinion, environmental influence and education will ultimately decide one’s personality and development.
some people claim that the disadvantages of the car are more than the advantages,do you agree or disagree?
  With the development of science and technology, the cars have already become the important component in our daily life gradually. Cars make our life convenient and swift. However, too many cars have caused very serious social problems. Some people claim that the disadvantages of car are more than the advantages. I doubt whether the argument can bear much analysis.
  Since one century [ago], the auto industry has [been] developed at full speed worldwide, and has brought the enormous progresses to our life. For example, the car is the most convenient tool of transportation. We can [be] on and off duty by car every day, we can go to travel by car on the vacation, we can utilize the cars to deal with some emergency too. The car [is] playing an important role in our daily life. They make our rhythm of life faster and faster, make our business become more and more efficient.
  On the other hand, the development of the automobile has brought a lot of infant industry to people, Give people countless employment opportunities too. Such as, manufacturing industry, repairing industry and maintaining industry. We are enjoying the convenience that the cars bring to us; at the same time we can utilize the auto industry to support ourselves.However, we can not ignore that too many cars cause enormous social problems, for example, traffic jam, air pollution, traffic accident, to which we have to find a solution.
  In a word, the cars have brought enormous change to our life; the advantages are far more than the disadvantages. We should recognize the merit of the cars, and do our best to solve the problems. If so, our life will be brighter.







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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing.
  What factors contribute to job satisfaction?
  How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
  工作满意度的影响因素,期望所有的劳动者都满意现实么?
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  Nowadays many adults have full-time jobs and the proportion of their lives spent doing such jobs is very high. So feelings about one’s job must reflect how an individual feels about his or her life as a whole, and because of this, job satisfaction is indeed very important for the wellbeing of that person.
  Employees get job satisfaction in a number of ways. Firstly, a person needs to feel that they are doing valued and valuable work, so positive feedback from superior is very important in his respect. A sense of fulfillment is also encouraged if a worker feels the job is worth doing because it contributes to the society or the economy as a whole. Secondly, when someone feels they are improving or developing their skills through training opportunities, for example, then there is a sense of progress and purpose that rewards a worker. The sense of belonging to a team or a working community also contributes to job satisfaction because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives. Satisfaction is also increased by a sense of responsibility for the loyal to a team.
  Of course not everyone enjoys their work. Hard economic realities mean that many people have little choice in the kind of job they can get. In some cases an employee is working in a job that suits neither their skills nor their personality. Some jobs are repetitive and boring, and labor relations may be poor and lead to resentment and insecurity rather than to job satisfaction.
  However, even though it is unlikely that all workers do feel happy in their work, I think it is not unrealistic to promote more job satisfaction in any job. If the factors identified above implemented, then any job can be improved and more workers can feel greater degrees of job satisfaction.(303words)




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 It’s generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.运动或音乐等才艺是天生的还是可以后天培养的?
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  The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, sport, art or music.
  Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music. So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.
  However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players. In other words, there is more to the skill than to a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequent a child practices.
  I personally think that some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level. But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeed because of both good training and natural talent. With the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent.
  In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required.


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 题目:More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

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  Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant.

  The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.

  However, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major cities.

  In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.



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  题目:As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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  Businesses have always sought to make a profit, but it is becoming increasingly common to hear people talk about the social obligations that companies have. I completely agree with the idea that businesses should do more for society than simply make money.

  On the one hand, I accept that businesses must make money in order to survive in a competitive world. It seems logical that the priority of any company should be to cover its running costs, such as employees’ wages and payments for buildings and utilities. On top of these costs, companies also need to invest in improvements and innovations if they wish to remain successful. If a company is unable to pay its bills or meet the changing needs of customers, any concerns about social responsibilities become irrelevant. In other words, a company can only make a positive contribution to society if it is in good financial health.

  On the other hand, companies should not be run with the sole aim of maximising profit; they have a wider role to play in society. One social obligation that owners and managers have is to treat their employees well, rather than exploiting them. For example, they could pay a “living wage” to ensure that workers have a good quality of life. I also like the idea that businesses could use a proportion of their profits to support local charities, environmental projects or education initiatives. Finally, instead of trying to minimise their tax payments by using accounting loopholes, I believe that company bosses should be happy to contribute to society through the tax system.

  In conclusion, I believe that companies should place as much importance on their social responsibilities as they do on their financial objectives.

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题目:Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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  People have differing views with regard to the question of how to make our roads safer. In my view, both punishments and a range of other measures can be used together to promote better driving habits.

  On the one hand, strict punishments can certainly help to encourage people to drive more safely. Penalties for dangerous drivers can act as a deterrent, meaning that people avoid repeating the same offence. There are various types of driving penalty, such as small fines, licence suspension, driver awareness courses, and even prison sentences. The aim of these punishments is to show dangerous drivers that their actions have negative consequences. As a result, we would hope that drivers become more disciplined and alert, and that they follow the rules more carefully.

  On the other hand, I believe that safe driving can be promoted in several different ways that do

  not punish drivers. Firstly, it is vitally important to educate people properly before they start to drive, and this could be done in schools or even as part of an extended or more difficult driving test. Secondly, more attention could be paid to safe road design. For example, signs can be used to warn people, speed bumps and road bends can be added to calm traffic, and speed cameras can help to deter people from driving too quickly. Finally, governments or local councils could reduce road accidents by investing in better public transport, which would mean that fewer people would need to travel by car.

  In conclusion, while punishments can help to prevent bad driving, I believe that other road safety measures should also be introduced.

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 题目:Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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  Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view.

  In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild animals have no place in the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists only for the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about this particular century that means that we suddenly have the right to allow or encourage the extinction of any species. Furthermore, there is no compelling reason why we should let animals die out. We do not need to exploit or destroy every last square metre of land in order to feed or accommodate the world’s population. There is plenty of room for us to exist side by side with wild animals, and this should be our aim.

  I also disagree with the idea that protecting animals is a waste of resources. It is usually the protection of natural habitats that ensures the survival of wild animals, and most scientists agree that these habitats are also crucial for human survival. For example, rainforests produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide and stabilise the Earth’s climate. If we destroyed these areas, the costs of managing the resulting changes to our planet would far outweigh the costs of conservation. By protecting wild animals and their habitats, we maintain the natural balance of all life on Earth.

  In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.

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  题目:Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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  It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.

  Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety of different ways.

  Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of happiness, most people would agree that there are some basic preconditions to achieving it. Firstly, it is hard for a person to be happy if he or she does not have a safe place to live and enough food to eat. Our basic survival needs must surely be met before we can lead a pleasant life. Secondly, the greatest joy in life is usually found in shared experiences with family and friends, and it is rare to find a person who is content to live in complete isolation. Other key factors could be individual freedom and a sense of purpose in life.

  In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because it is particular to each individual, but I believe that our basic needs for shelter, food and company need to be fulfilled before we can experience it.

  (292 words, band 9)

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