某只了解自己的英语作文水平很差~也许是非常差！[s:273][s:273][s:273]所以来坛子求助大家的帮忙了！[s:258][s:252][s:252]
Dear my past self
I am now studying in Xiamen University and I am satisfied with my present conditions actually. This university has a good environment and I can develop my dream easily. I also can arrange times. It is very good for my mental and body.
It is without doubt that you are standing the important crossroads. So you have the positive attitude to face the study life. You have some study ways, there are many useful ways of this, such as preparing the course, always to find the answer when you are confused and plan a time list.
The one thing that is clear you will have significant impart for me. On the one hand, I developed a habit for using time list to waste time.
Because of this, I always have spare time to do anything what I want .On another hand; I have some bad habits .It brings about bad effect on my life. You really need to work hard and it is a long-time solution to a long-term study problem. You should change the bad habits. People are noticing the same things that good habits are a good start towards a better future.
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As is reported in the first half of 2010 over 70,000fires broke out nationwide causing 656 deaths and 271 injures. The terrible fire of last November in Jing’s a District, Shanghai also claimed 53 lives.
While a fire happens, we really need to stay clam. It is without doubt that we have a hope to survive. One way to find the suitable point and get out as possible. What can we wet a clothes and cover it over your mouth and nose before rushing out. Another important thing to keeping close to the floor finds the way out. If the door is surrounded with fire and you are on the first floor or second floor, you can try to climb out through the window. But if you are in third floor, you had better not to jump may lead to injure. Thy need to learn more knowledge about safe problems, but the good truth is that people realized the importance of safety. Safety are a good start towards a better future.
【捂脸】~~超级丢脸的说啊~~

额，我来谈谈我的看法吧。

首先，第一篇，你是想写一个书信体吗？那么要有书信的格式哦。

下面，我主要的还是说说语法方面的问题吧。

1.  I also can arrange times.  
通常，我觉得also 应该放在 can 后面。

2.  It is very good for my mental and body.
mental 是一个形容词，和后面的body不搭。我建议可以使用mind。

3. It is without doubt that you are standing the important crossroads.
standing 后面少了一个 at。

4. You have some study ways, there are many useful ways of this,
这两句重复，可以去掉一个。

5. The one thing that is clear you will have significant impart for me.
应该是The one thing that is clear is that you ....  我建议使用It is clear that 的句型更简洁。impart，我不懂你是不是想说印象？如果是印象的话，应该是impression of me。

6.  I developed a habit for using time list to waste time.
我想你的意思应该是避免浪费时间。to avoid wasting time。

7. I always have spare time to do anything what I want.
应该是 to do anything I want. 或者 to do what I want。


第二篇

1. Jing’s a District,  
可能拼写错误，不知道是说的哪儿。

2. One way to find the suitable point and get out as possible.
suitable point 是指什么？逃生通道吗？我觉得应该写成 One way is to find the nearest fire exit and get out as soon as possible.

3. What can we wet a clothes and cover it over your mouth and nose before rushing out.
应该改成What you can do is to wet a piece of clothes and cover it over your mouth and nose before rushing out.

4. Another important thing to keeping close to the floor finds the way out.
应该改成Another important thing is to keep close to the floor until find the way out.

5. But if you are in third floor, you had better not to jump may lead to injure.
应该是 But if you are on the third floor, you had better not jump (没有 to), which may lead to injury.

6. Thy need to learn more knowledge about safe problems.
我觉得这里的主语可能用we 更好。

7. but the good truth is that people realized the importance of safety.
这里用现在完成时比较好。people have realized the importance of safety

8. Safety are a good start towards a better future.
are 应该改成 is.

希希指出的问题我就不重复了~
有一些细节方面的问题和搭配的建议~

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第一篇：

1. I can develop my dream easily.
我觉得dream其实可以加复数，梦想可能不止一个。另外，感觉develop和dream的搭配不是特别好，develop和skills之类的会比较搭。dream的话，可以用cherish（意思和你原来有些出入）

2. I also can arrange times.
我觉得这个意义的time应该是不可数的，arrange my time可能就可以了

3. It is very good for my mental and body.
可以和希希说的那样把mental改为mind，如果要保留mental，可以说mental and physical well-being。（就是稍微有点文绉绉的）

4. It is without doubt that you are standing the important crossroads.
建议改为an important crossroad，你不太可能同时站在很多个十字路口。

5. So you have the positive attitude to face the study life.
我觉得you后面少一个应该吧，you should have，如果你是站在给过去的自己提建议的角度写

6. ...you will have significant impart
我感觉你应该是想用impact，这样的话，要么加复数，要么significant前面加a，后面的介词也应该用on

7.I developed a habit for using time list to waste time.
和希希一样，我觉得你应该是说避免浪费时间，time list这种说法我没见到过，可以用schedule, timetable之类的来表示

8. 之前出现了on the one hand，这里用On the other hand 比较好。

9. You should change the bad habits.
改变坏习惯可以get out of，change 一般会放在habit后面，尤其常用在已经改变之后的情况下。

10.People are noticing the same things that good habits are a good start towards a better future.
我觉得noticing 后面可以用this phenomenon（如果你觉得这是一个普遍现象的话），另外，后面半句配合有点问题，一会儿单数一会儿复数不太好，可以改为 having good habits is a good start...

第二篇：
1.  in Jing’s a District, Shanghai also claimed 53 lives.
你如果说上海静安区的话，应该是Jing'an District

2. While a fire happens, we really need to stay clam. It is without doubt that we have a hope to survive.
fire一般不和happen搭配，通常是break out
hope一般不可数，我觉得此处chance相对合适一点。

3. ...wet a clothes and cover it over your mouth...
因为之前用了we，这里最好保持人称一致，用our mouths and noses

4. ...need to learn more knowledge about safe problems,
knowledge可以省略

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PS：其实你写的挺不错的了~o(∩_∩)o

差不多楼上两位 都说到了  

Thank you very much~~

~~~thanks~~